Atonement Broken (A Love Tale Of Menaka And Vishwamitra)

Rating: 5.0
Sage Vishwamitra
deeper in penance
years has passed
never opened his eyes
sparkling like fire
penance like unconquerable
Indra, the king of gods,
horrified overwhelmed
steep spiritual rise of
tapasya would make
sage very powerful
even conquer heaven
anxious Indra sent Menaka,
a beautiful dancer of his court,
to earth break his penance
a celestial nymph
spiritual powers.
Youthful and vibrant
Viswamitra with his eyes closed
She sang, danced,
garlands of fragrant flowers
put them around
Vishwamitra opened his eyes
O beauty of heaven
your body shines
like a diamond flame,
a spotless beauty
alike the moon’s.
a black-eyed beauty
on the hill-top,
like a golden girl.
The hill, its creepers,
its bushes, all flamed
With the golden beauty
of the golden girl.
she appealed,
O chief of the majesty
your tapas is magnificent
O my Lord
surrendered my whole to you
marry me, marry me,
What worked once,
may work again
Sage felt lust and passion
well up inside him
saw her swimming naked
lake near the waterfall.
gave up penance to be with her
made love for years together.
Menaka had come with a mission,
but fell deeply in love
two shared a passion
experienced by none else
Vishwamitra came to know
Indra's devious trick
aware of Menaka's genuine love
therefore, merely cursed her
separated from beloved forever.
Menaka left for heavens
she was pregnant
a beautiful baby born
baby left at sage Kanva's ashram
to be continued..............
Tuesday, October 20, 2015
Topic(s) of this poem: beauty,love and life,lust,attraction,beautiful
Once Sage Vishwamitra was performing a very difficult tapasya. Indra, the king of gods, was afraid that once completed, the tapasya would make Vishwamitra very powerful and he would even, So Indra sent Menaka, a beautiful dancer of his court, to earth to break his penance.find out the next here.....
Edward Kofi Louis 10 February 2016
Years has passed! But, you still have hope ahead. Nice work.
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Ramesh Rai 06 December 2015
What did move Vishwamitra is untold and I don't agree with any pleading. You have crafted very nicely. In fact it is tough to depict a story in a poetic articulation. My Sita is still incomplete and hope to complete shortly. Your endeavor is always praiseworthy. Keep it up. Marks - 10
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Dr Antony Theodore 17 November 2015
beautiful poem. vishwamitra and Menaka. and the graphic is so wonderful. gave you a big 10
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Akhtar Jawad 22 October 2015
I don't know Sanskirit but I have read translation of Abhigyan Shakuntlam. The way you have started the story is beautiful and amazing. Happy to read that it will continue. I expect many more beautiful poems like this. I have started thinking whether you will and how you will describe the union of Shakuntla and Dushyant after gandharva Vivah. It's not difficult for a poet but you are a poetess from the east. It will be interesting to see whether you ignore it or you boldly describe it. And if you describe it I hope it will be the most artistic chapter of this long poem. My well wishes are with you.
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Anita Sharma 23 October 2015
well thanks for your kind words sir and motivation as far the reality and boldness goes would try to do it in best possible way.. thanks for reading sir
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Abdulrazak Aralimatti 21 October 2015
Verily, a good narration........10 Loved reading it
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Anita Sharma 23 October 2015
thanku sir
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M Asim Nehal 20 October 2015
Superb, the untold story in your own words, waiting for part 2........Liked it, nice flow with great imagery.
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Anita Sharma 21 October 2015
hey thank you asim
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