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Atonement Broken (A Love Tale Of Menaka And Vishwamitra)

Rating: 5.0

Sage Vishwamitra
deeper in penance
years has passed
never opened his eyes
sparkling like fire
penance like unconquerable
Indra, the king of gods,
horrified overwhelmed
steep spiritual rise of
tapasya would make

sage very powerful
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Atonement Broken (A Love Tale Of Menaka And Vishwamitra)
Tuesday, October 20, 2015
Topic(s) of this poem: beauty,love and life,lust,attraction,beautiful
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
Once Sage Vishwamitra was performing a very difficult tapasya. Indra, the king of gods, was afraid that once completed, the tapasya would make Vishwamitra very powerful and he would even, So Indra sent Menaka, a beautiful dancer of his court, to earth to break his penance.find out the next here.....
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COMMENTS OF THE POEM
M Asim Nehal 20 October 2015

Superb, the untold story in your own words, waiting for part 2........Liked it, nice flow with great imagery.

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Anita Sharma 21 October 2015

hey thank you asim

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Edward Kofi Louis 10 February 2016

Years has passed! But, you still have hope ahead. Nice work.

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Ramesh Rai 06 December 2015

What did move Vishwamitra is untold and I don't agree with any pleading. You have crafted very nicely. In fact it is tough to depict a story in a poetic articulation. My Sita is still incomplete and hope to complete shortly. Your endeavor is always praiseworthy. Keep it up. Marks - 10

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Dr Antony Theodore 17 November 2015

beautiful poem. vishwamitra and Menaka. and the graphic is so wonderful. gave you a big 10

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Akhtar Jawad 22 October 2015

I don't know Sanskirit but I have read translation of Abhigyan Shakuntlam. The way you have started the story is beautiful and amazing. Happy to read that it will continue. I expect many more beautiful poems like this. I have started thinking whether you will and how you will describe the union of Shakuntla and Dushyant after gandharva Vivah. It's not difficult for a poet but you are a poetess from the east. It will be interesting to see whether you ignore it or you boldly describe it. And if you describe it I hope it will be the most artistic chapter of this long poem. My well wishes are with you.

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Anita Sharma 23 October 2015

well thanks for your kind words sir and motivation as far the reality and boldness goes would try to do it in best possible way.. thanks for reading sir

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Abdulrazak Aralimatti 21 October 2015

Verily, a good narration........10 Loved reading it

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Anita Sharma 23 October 2015

thanku sir

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