Dear friends and kin
This be my exhorting
Walk not the path of treachery
Gaze the heaven with clemency
Be thou not brutal.
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Gentle thy heart and brow
And thy grace shall like thistle grow
Be then honest and kind
God knoweth, thy deeds he finds
Be thou not brutal
.
From men, he shall favour proffer
From divine he mercifully confers
Life hath by law its reciprocation
After death cometh an endless duration
Be thou not brutal.
OK. This is good. But I am concerned about the repetitivness of the phrase be thou not brutal in between the lines.. i think it is too much of it.. i think it would have be better if it was stanza-links rather linking lines of one stanza... so i think.. but it is a good poem still..
Ifedayo, thanks for the observation, good friend. Your advice has been followed.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
I enjoyed the flow and the beautiful rhyme. Good one there
Allotey, I am delighted with you comment.