Doom and Gloom

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Betrayal - Poem by Doom and Gloom

Good day to thee my worthless friend, I see you’ve shown your full intent
While others rally to defend, no one knows where you went
Hello to thee my part time chum, I see you fled the dragons lair
While former friends die one by one, they turn for help but you're not there
Greetings to thee my life long mate, we trusted you with all our hearts
We remembered you in final thoughts, as we watched ourselves get ripped apart
Goodbye to you fair-weather friend, was good until you turned and fled
Think of us from time to time, the ones you loved then left for dead


Comments about Betrayal by Doom and Gloom

  • (8/13/2008 8:35:00 AM)

    The agony of the human condition! Excellent. (Report)Reply

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  • (9/15/2007 1:57:00 PM)

    Great stuff, cut down the middle and left floundering. well written! !
    it sorts out the would be's and the fakers...from the pure of heart.
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  • (7/26/2007 5:29:00 AM)

    Seems like a very effective Reverse Psychology to me to attract attention from friends who start to ignore our presence. Very good piece though.10 for me. (Report)Reply

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  • (7/10/2007 9:48:00 AM)

    Your wit and sarcasm made me laugh. Many of us have non-friends deserving of those exact words. (Report)Reply

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  • (6/11/2007 2:56:00 AM)

    I find this poem really interesting. Who is the friend that is portrayed in this poem? Because he(it?) hasn't just hurt you, but also numerous others that was 'left for dead' by him. What did he do to inflict so much suffering(death?) and hurt on so many people? Hmm...: -) (Report)Reply

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  • (6/4/2007 2:44:00 PM)

    LOVE the intro! Such sarcasm 'good day to thee my worthless friend' i daresay it should be the title and Oft repeated in the mantra! Wish i had created the line myself! (Report)Reply

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  • (5/30/2007 1:33:00 AM)

    What is betrayal? Lemme hear YOUR version, and does it mean someone is 'betraying' if they sleep with someone else when they're 'with' someone they 'say' they 'love? '

    What is that considered?
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  • (5/19/2007 5:55:00 PM)

    Very well written and touched a nerve, eased some hurt. Thank you. (Report)Reply

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  • (5/19/2007 5:24:00 AM)

    really good poem friend...lot of anguish..
    no wonder so many people read ur poems..
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  • john tiong chunghoo (4/3/2007 6:55:00 AM)

    yes so doom and gloom the friendship. (Report)Reply

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  • (3/26/2007 6:52:00 PM)

    Without betrayal we all stay children. Though it be bitter, may we grow strong from it. (Report)Reply

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  • (3/20/2007 11:09:00 PM)

    Ouch! I think this is how friends felt when I left South Africa. (Report)Reply

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  • (2/21/2007 6:24:00 AM)

    i love this poem.. it is deeply moving and very profound..

    i think you have a wonderful way with words and conveying emotion..

    i cant wait to read more :) xx
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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, February 20, 2007

Poem Edited: Friday, January 21, 2011


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