Betrayal Poem by Doom & Gloom


Rating: 3.6

Good day to thee my worthless friend, I see you've shown your full intent
While others rally to defend, no one knows where you went
Hello to thee my part time chum, I see you fled the dragons lair
While former friends die one by one, they turn for help but you're not there
Greetings to thee my life long mate, we trusted you with all our hearts
We remembered you in final thoughts, as we watched ourselves get ripped apart
Goodbye to you fair-weather friend, was good until you turned and fled
Think of us from time to time, the ones you loved then left for dead

BEAU GOLDEN 04 June 2007

LOVE the intro! Such sarcasm 'good day to thee my worthless friend' i daresay it should be the title and Oft repeated in the mantra! Wish i had created the line myself!

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Francois Hoon 11 June 2007

I find this poem really interesting. Who is the friend that is portrayed in this poem? Because he(it?) hasn't just hurt you, but also numerous others that was 'left for dead' by him. What did he do to inflict so much suffering(death?) and hurt on so many people? Hmm...: -)

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Sarah Loves 30 May 2007

What is betrayal? Lemme hear YOUR version, and does it mean someone is 'betraying' if they sleep with someone else when they're 'with' someone they 'say' they 'love? ' What is that considered?

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Fallen Angel of Avalon 21 February 2007

i love this poem.. it is deeply moving and very profound.. i think you have a wonderful way with words and conveying emotion.. i cant wait to read more :) xx

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John Raubenheimer 20 March 2007

Ouch! I think this is how friends felt when I left South Africa.

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Hellio 17 January 2020

The peotry is excellent but the voice not.

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James B. Earley 13 August 2008

The agony of the human condition! Excellent.

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Steve Chering 15 September 2007

Great stuff, cut down the middle and left floundering. well written! ! it sorts out the would be's and the fakers...from the pure of heart.

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Marvin Brato 26 July 2007

Seems like a very effective Reverse Psychology to me to attract attention from friends who start to ignore our presence. Very good piece though.10 for me.

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Shar Thompson 10 July 2007

Your wit and sarcasm made me laugh. Many of us have non-friends deserving of those exact words.

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