Fay Slimm

Rookie - 112 Points (Ageless. / in Cornwall U.K.)

Bewildered Love. - Poem by Fay Slimm

God, how do I choose when my Mom and my Dad
Ask me a question that splits me in two?
I don't think either of them is so sad
As to expect me to be able to
Know where I stand in their unpleasant life.
God I am supposed to choose now where I live.
How can I portion my love amidst strife
Such as they show, neither Mom or Dad give
In to the fact that I love them both
Equally well, - how can I tell who will
Miss me the most, and that throughout my growth
I will grieve at leaving one here, and still
More bewildering, how can I then show
Parental care fairly? God, please let me know.


Comments about Bewildered Love. by Fay Slimm

  • James Roberts (10/23/2008 3:02:00 AM)

    Excellant I've lost both my parents who were both very strong individuals and argumentative it reminds me of what it was like when my loyalties were divided
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  • Carl Harris (10/22/2008 10:50:00 AM)

    Although I did not come from a broken home, where the parents split or divorced, I did live in a home where there was little love expressed between my parents for most of my memory, Fay. It is a very awkward feeling for a child who realizes there is little love between their parents, since we are all taught from our youngest years that love is what makes the world go round. Your deeply touching and thought provoking poem expresses this feeling very well, that one of utter confusion for fear of showing too much favoritism to one parent or the other and being reproved for it by the 'slighted' parent. It is a wonderful, candid, and memorable write. Carl. (Report)Reply

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  • Vincent James Turner (10/17/2008 9:14:00 AM)

    WoW! this is great, its the sort of questions a child would acutally ask, some of these really hit home, you have a wonderfull way of caputuring the 'real' its a real pleasure to have discovered your work. 'God, how do I choose when my Mom and my Dad
    Ask me a question that splits me in two' this is really striking and makes me reflect on my own youth, great work

    Vincent
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  • Vincent James Turner (10/17/2008 9:12:00 AM)

    WoW! this is great, its the sort of questions a child would acutally ask, some of these really hit home, you have a wonderfull way of caputuring the 'real' its a real pleasure to have discovered your work. 'God, how do I choose when my Mom and my Dad
    Ask me a question that splits me in two' this is really striking and makes me reflect on my own youth, great work

    Vincent
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  • Bob Gibson (10/14/2008 12:51:00 AM)

    It 's not up to you to call the shot
    Mam and Dad', that was there lot!
    we try to have a more stable life
    i broke the cycle, with my wife!
    love life Fay! your a star!
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  • Kevin Eaglesfield (10/10/2008 9:16:00 AM)

    Wow.My childhood, my children, my struggle.My goodness this is true.Kev x (Report)Reply

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  • Reshma Ramesh (10/10/2008 1:49:00 AM)

    very tight spot for the kids i agree...well done (Report)Reply

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  • David ThreadgoldDavid Threadgold (10/9/2008 4:40:00 PM)

    What a good subject to cover and from a childs point of view, the parents often forget how deeply their children are hurt, and how can they be expected to choose. Fantastic insight and a great read10/10/10 Regards Dave T (Report)Reply

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  • Tom BalchTom Balch (10/9/2008 2:31:00 PM)

    Bewildered indeed, a meaningful piece Fay, as always the question is passed on 10/10 Tom (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, October 9, 2008

Poem Edited: Thursday, October 9, 2008


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