Big Bang Theory Poem by David DeSantis

Big Bang Theory

Rating: 5.0


I’m a train track
With a knack
for coffee.

A one-way ocean liner
Powered by steam
And defiant of the currents
Around me…


I used to love the art scene
And often,
incongruent things:

like some sort of cataract,
ally-wack,
visine,
drip-drop,
eye clean
hobby.

I am a ying-yang
Thought stream
Powered by
feng shui
energy beams

A naturalized naturalist,
Pessimistic
Pacifist

It’s safe to say
That I’m not very

Sunny.




Copyright (c) David DeSantis

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Loyd C Taylor Sr 24 April 2008

Hello poet David. Great read man. LC

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R H 19 April 2008

A great run of images that flow seamlessly into one another - the sponteneity of thought echoes loud and clear - a revealing and emotionally charged write. j.

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L M 18 April 2008

Oh my God! ! ! I love this poem! It is shockingly pungent and bitter sweet. At a moment I felt a George Carlin tone, but you 'wacked' your own unique verbato in the last few lines. Wonderous, truly!

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Lynda Robson 17 April 2008

Loved this David, a wonderful play on words, I am interested in the Big Bang theory myself lol,10 for this, Lynda xx

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Ivor Hogg 16 April 2008

an engaging write about being disengaged.Imagintive use or words a touch satyrical tinged with underlying sadness

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Delilah Miller 10 July 2008

Absolutely agree with Janice. It's almost of parody of performance poetry, but when it actually does end with a bang it actually left it on a serious note for me. The jaunty rhyme scheme helped add the chaos element. It's a home run in my book! Delilah

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Janice Windle 10 May 2008

This had me laughing out loud on the word 'Sunny'! Then I fried reading it aloud. It's a fantastic poem to chant. I love this. I shall come back to it and chant it again - it's given me an appetite for chanting it!

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Interesting poem that gives the reader a smile...and it is just a good piece of poetry. Great imagery......Keep sharing. Shelley

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Tsira Goge 30 April 2008

A naturalized naturalist, Pessimistic Pacifist It’s safe to say That I’m not very Sunny. ............ Hello David, I like these last lines very much... Thank you for your fine the comment. Tsira

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Onelia Avelar 29 April 2008

Your poems are sort of a challenge for the imagination - the images and views are changing so fast i need a rest :) . Let me see what is the next.

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