Doom and Gloom

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Bruised & Burnt - Poem by Doom and Gloom

I feel as though my skin is taut & stretched so tightly over bone
On a rack my body caught stretched until my form has grown
I feel as though my head is cracked & all I am is fading fast
Insanity has now attacked, erasing present, future, past.
I feel as though my heart has died & rots inside my broken chest
Polluting all I am inside, and spreading to devour the rest.
I feel as though the end is nigh & I shall burn in fire bright
In pain is how I now will die & in the darkness give you light.

Comments about Bruised & Burnt by Doom and Gloom

  • (6/11/2007 2:37:00 AM)

    You definately have a talent like few in the world my friend, but I'm worried about your soul. It cannot just be that you imagine these things you are writing. I think you must be experiencing them to be able to express it so vividly. May you find peace...

    'For what does it profit a man if he gains the whole world, and loses his own soul? '
    Mark 8: 36

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  • (5/19/2007 5:30:00 AM)

    i dont know wht to say.....lot of darkness in this poem...... (Report)Reply

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  • Jeff Hobbs (5/17/2007 9:34:00 PM)

    I love the way the physical imagery is used to show the inner spiritual torment. Quite nifty really! (Report)Reply

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  • Melvina Germain (4/10/2007 12:17:00 AM)

    Oh my, what a shame, this is so sad, it truly is. I can certainly understand the last line, which indicates without this darkness the partner of this individual would now experience light. I would rather think though that this unhappy person seek the light themselves. Excellent poem never-the-less--Mevina-- (Report)Reply

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  • (4/6/2007 10:48:00 PM)

    I would prefer that you not think like that,
    but, if you must ...
    given where you are coming from ...
    that is actually well said!

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, February 22, 2007

Poem Edited: Friday, April 8, 2011

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