Carnal Poem by M.J. Lemon

Carnal

Rating: 4.7


Speak quickly
hear
a military rank
touch gently
feel
another's shank

Tuesday, June 13, 2017
Topic(s) of this poem: grook,humorous,humour,rhyme
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
This is what evolved after a few old prison movies and some double entendre.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bri Edwards 06 August 2019

This is all Grook to me. bri :)

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Mj Lemon 07 August 2019

Thank you, Bri! And this isn't even a Greek Grook! !

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Kumarmani Mahakul 15 November 2018

Speak quickly hear a military rank touch gently feel another's shank....amusing expression. Beautiful poem with humor is nicely executed.

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Mj Lemon 19 November 2018

Thank you for all the great support of my work. Thanks, Kumarmani.

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Bri Edwards 09 April 2018

sorry, it hasn't evolved enough yet for me to 'get it' entirely. i've about two minutes before supper to see another. bri :)

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Mj Lemon 10 April 2018

Thanks, Bri! It really depends on how quickly you say those words...maybe say them together.... again...and again...

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Simone Inez Harriman 15 August 2017

I get the feeling of fear and fervor in this little think- tank poem that gives a few diverse interpretations, which is what I love about it.

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Mj Lemon 15 August 2017

Thank you so much, Simone. Yes, the intent was to create or leave open a number of possibilities. Interpretations that lean towards the horrific work well, as do those that rest in the comedic.

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Richard Wlodarski 27 June 2017

M.J., I can see and fully appreciate why you would've written this grook after watching those movies. And it's really very funny. However, is it just me who's reading something into the double entendre that may not be there. Maybe I've been too engrossed (grossed out) with the Bill Cosby case (s) . Or especially, the Armed Forces sexual assault cases. But until I read the topics and your notes, I actually thought it was about the latter. Hope I didn't insult you!

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Mj Lemon 27 June 2017

Richard, thank you so very much! And yes, your interpretation is absolutely one of the possible meanings. In fact, it did come to mind as I was finishing the poem. I've been able to come up with five different meanings. They range from the benign to the bawdy. I am sure there are even more.

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