M.J. Lemon


Carnal - Poem by M.J. Lemon

Speak quickly
hear
a military rank
touch gently
feel
another's shank

Topic(s) of this poem: grook, humorous, humour, rhyme

Form: Free Verse


Poet's Notes about The Poem

This is what evolved after a few old prison movies and some double entendre.

Comments about Carnal by M.J. Lemon

  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (8/6/2019 5:48:00 PM)

    This is all Grook to me.

    bri

    :)
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    Mj Lemon(8/7/2019 10:56:00 PM)

    Thank you, Bri! And this isn't even a Greek Grook! !

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  • Kumarmani MahakulKumarmani Mahakul (11/15/2018 4:52:00 PM)

    Speak quickly
    hear
    a military rank
    touch gently
    feel
    another's shank....amusing expression. Beautiful poem with humor is nicely executed.
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    Mj Lemon(11/19/2018 4:10:00 PM)

    Thank you for all the great support of my work. Thanks, Kumarmani.

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  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (4/9/2018 11:11:00 PM)

    sorry, it hasn't evolved enough yet for me to 'get it' entirely. i've about two minutes before supper to see another.

    bri :)
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    Mj Lemon(4/10/2018 12:23:00 PM)

    Thanks, Bri! It really depends on how quickly you say those words...maybe say them together.... again...and again...

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  • Moira CameronMoira Cameron (9/11/2017 7:05:00 PM)

    I find this one delightfully curious. By altering the emphases of the endings of lines, the concepts inspired by the words change dramatically:
    Speak
    quickly hear
    a military
    rank touch
    gently feel
    another's shank

    Fun to play around with.
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    Mj Lemon(9/15/2017 10:44:00 AM)

    Thank you so much, Moira. In fact this was inspired by someone I knew. He used to say things like, I know that's how you write it. But I say it... Thanks again.

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  • Simone Inez Harriman (8/15/2017 5:43:00 PM)

    I get the feeling of fear and fervor in this little think- tank poem that gives a few diverse interpretations, which is what I love about it. (Report)Reply

    Mj Lemon(8/15/2017 11:26:00 PM)

    Thank you so much, Simone. Yes, the intent was to create or leave open a number of possibilities. Interpretations that lean towards the horrific work well, as do those that rest in the comedic.

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  • Richard Wlodarski (6/27/2017 8:40:00 PM)

    M.J., I can see and fully appreciate why you would've written this grook after watching those movies. And it's really very funny. However, is it just me who's reading something into the double entendre that may not be there. Maybe I've been too engrossed (grossed out) with the Bill Cosby case (s) . Or especially, the Armed Forces sexual assault cases. But until I read the topics and your notes, I actually thought it was about the latter. Hope I didn't insult you! (Report)Reply

    Mj Lemon(6/27/2017 11:41:00 PM)

    Richard, thank you so very much! And yes, your interpretation is absolutely one of the possible meanings. In fact, it did come to mind as I was finishing the poem. I've been able to come up with five different meanings. They range from the benign to the bawdy. I am sure there are even more.

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  • Kim BarneyKim Barney (6/19/2017 6:50:00 PM)

    I didn't know Poem Hunter had a category called grook!
    Never heard of that word before, and it's not in my dictionary. Did you just make it up and ask PH to include it as a category?
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    Mj Lemon(6/19/2017 10:45:00 PM)

    Hi Kim, thanks for stopping by. And no, I had nothing to do with the invention of the grook. It is in fact the brainchild of Piet Hein, a Danish scientist and author.

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  • Kumarmani MahakulKumarmani Mahakul (6/19/2017 2:10:00 AM)

    Humorous one. Nicely depicted. Thanks for sharing. (Report)Reply

    Mj Lemon(6/19/2017 2:40:00 PM)

    Thanks so very much, Kumarmani.

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  • Unwritten SoulUnwritten Soul (6/14/2017 1:56:00 AM)

    LOL.... i didnt noticed that; p (Report)Reply

    Mj Lemon(6/15/2017 12:56:00 PM)

    Thanks, Soul! Something in your comment has me wondering about kernel.....

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, June 13, 2017



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