Shania K. Younce

Rookie - 453 Points (4-18-1996 / I can´t remember.)

'Cold' - Poem by Shania K. Younce

It freezes in all places.
It's beliefs our strongly held.
To be or not to be conformed.
In it's beauty strifes is beheld.

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Comments about 'Cold' by Shania K. Younce

  • Bri Edwards (4/4/2014 6:46:00 PM)

    thanks for sharing your (apparent) secrets about this poem in a recent message to me. are you sure you aren't pulling my leg a bit with the message? i wish 'patricia' could read what you sent me, but I WON'T send it to her.
    bri ;)
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  • Bri Edwards (3/30/2014 4:41:00 PM)

    shania, both you and 'patricia grantham' (she left comment) use it's when you 'should' use its (no apostrophe in the 'possessive' I-T-S) .

    i found this online:

    Its vs. It’s

    Would you like to know the #1 Grammar Error?
    Hint: The word involved is small and it’s contained in this sentence.

    That’s right: its vs. it’s
    Yet the two rules are actually quite easy to remember.

    Rule 1: When you mean it is or it has, use an apostrophe.

    It’s a nice day.
    It’s your right to refuse the invitation.
    It’s been great getting to know you.

    Rule 2: When you are using its as a possessive, don’t use the apostrophe.

    The cat hurt its paw.
    The furniture store celebrated its tenth anniversary.

    Note: From what we understand, the possessive was also written it’s until a couple of hundred years ago. While we don’t know for certain, it is possible that the apostrophe was dropped in order to parallel possessive personal pronouns like hers, theirs, yours, ours, etc.”

    Posted on Thursday, April 12,2012, at 5: 35 pm.
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    It freezes in all places.
    It's beliefs our strongly held. ....[ i don't know who/what It refers to. the cold? ? do you really mean our, or do you mean are? ]
    To be or not to be conformed. ....[ i don't understand your use of be conformed. i don't think anything can BE conformed. but something/somebody can conform TO something. maybe a conformist would work here?
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    noun: conformist; plural noun: conformists

    a person who conforms to accepted behavior or established practices.
    synonyms: traditionalist, conservative, stickler, formalist, diehard, reactionary; More
    informalstick-in-the-mud, stuffed shirt
    he was too much of a conformist to wear anything but a suit
    antonyms: eccentric, rebel
    a person who conforms to the practices of the Church of England.

    adjective: conformist

    (of a person or activity) conforming to accepted behavior or established practices; conventional.
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    In it's beauty strifes is beheld. ....[how about In its beauty strife is beheld. OR In its beauty strife's held.....? ]

    thanks for sharing. bri :)
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  • Patricia Grantham (2/1/2014 3:06:00 PM)

    Good poem Shania. Even the cold has it's harshness for
    in it there is found no sense of well being. Nice.
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Poem Submitted: Thursday, January 30, 2014

Poem Edited: Tuesday, February 11, 2014

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