Viola Grey

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Dance With Me - Poem by Viola Grey

Come, take my hand
as we dance within walls
pitch black with lonliness,
to a deafening tune
of silent cymbals
crashing in truth.

Waltz freely with desire,
as it drags you under
to drown us once more
within blood filled lust
of shallow joy.

Each small, sad tear
screams your name
across my cheeks,
where into my mouth
your name then dies
upon clenched teeth.

This dance we weave
with wistfull words
blends truth with lies,
surrounding us in music
of cold laughter
and forgotten promises.

But - still we take the beat,
join our hands,
then, once again,
we dance.

28/9/08


Comments about Dance With Me by Viola Grey

  • (5/10/2009 1:53:00 AM)

    wow the dance of the gods
    of silent cymbals
    crashing in truth
    wonderful imagery
    -10 anjali
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  • (4/6/2009 10:38:00 PM)

    what a macabre dance! (Report)Reply

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  • (1/9/2009 7:30:00 PM)

    Wow! The first stanza immediately dragged me in to your rich lusting words that continued wonderfully throughout the piece. The dance theme allowed you to play your part so well. This must be surely one of your best poems! Karin Anderson (Report)Reply

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  • (11/30/2008 12:25:00 AM)

    where into my mouth
    your name then dies
    upon clenched teeth.
    I love those lines. very good job.
    Becca
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  • (11/2/2008 10:43:00 AM)

    This poem is amazing.
    There are so many parts I like
    You have amazing talent
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  • Fay Slimm (10/12/2008 1:41:00 AM)

    This has all the primitive essence of ice-cold fire Viola - such economy of words too, where needed. So well done. a big 10 + + + from Fay. (Report)Reply

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  • Kesav Easwaran (10/5/2008 1:01:00 AM)

    life dancing to the truth music...words expressive sad...bitter but coated with poetic sugar...well written piece, Viola 10 (Report)Reply

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  • (10/1/2008 4:12:00 PM)

    A work of art encompassing all that lies within a love-trialed relationship of two unsuited for each other yet neither wants to live without the other...10 (Report)Reply

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  • Tom Balch (9/29/2008 2:39:00 AM)

    Walls pitch black with loneliness, this is sad 10 from Tom (Report)Reply

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  • Melanie Williams (9/28/2008 8:51:00 PM)

    wow.
    i loved the choice of words
    i felt them course through me.
    i loved it alot.
    i'll be reading some of your others
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Poem Submitted: Sunday, September 28, 2008



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