Dashed Poem by rinki nandy

Dashed

Rating: 5.0


I saw you in my dream today, you looked so close and yet so far,
you were looking so sweet and lovable,
your mouth so inviting and kissable,
the illusion so real that i could feel you lying next to me,
you were unaware of my presence, not even talking to me,
i was not alone with you on the bed,
o! how i tried to touch you, understand you, love you,
i longed to get close, at least a hug,
my desperation i let loose,
you seemed indifferent, like lost in another world,
my presence didn't matter, you didn't care if i was there,
not once did you look at me, ignored and neglected me,
know i am just one of them of your fans,
the affect you have on me is so intense,
wish i could break the spell and bring back my sense,
i am searching for a door to escape,
tired of this phenomena, leads to insomnia,
my life is a living hell,
i don't want anymore of this bitter chocolate,
either i live without your love or become like you.....a late,
my heart and mind are troubling my life,
tried but failed to throw you out,
i couldn't come out,
doomed i am and helpless today,
you have inspired and deprived me,
damned and dashed me.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 23 January 2010

saw you in my dream today, you looked so close and yet so far, you were looking so sweet and lovable, your mouth so inviting and kissable, the illusion so real that i could feel you lying next t.inner desire sometimes make us happy in dreams and sweet memory as if living in heaven...lovely ideas to reveal...10 read mine......simple grace....haiti

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Complicated love. An interesting read! Good expression! ; D

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Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK 09 July 2010

Illusory clairvoyance …leads to crashlanding…… but as reader I find indeed poetry of jolty jilt reflected in ‘i couldn't come out, /doomed i am and helpless today, ‘… Any amount of emotion pumped in will fail to make any comeback or wake up call for such guy…as it’s a poetry from a Lady….Yeah I’d say phew out such emotion [but poetically conceive it please] …stand with straight spine…and make their spine just jelly… thanks for sharing … Ms. Nivedita UK 10/10

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Allemagne Roßmann 27 January 2010

Bitter chocolate is quite interesting topic of research.....should be malteasers-they contain specimen of bitterness or may be your taste was bitter when you felt like that.........dashing writing dashed eevery1.

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Antonio Liao 25 January 2010

Appetite to the Psychologist....ready but emmm...they too is weak, like a medicine of their taste, Yet! Exact but not compete....very intriguing to all readers...thank you....God bless

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Antonio Liao 25 January 2010

Appetite to the Psychologist....ready but emmm...they too is weak, like a medicine of their taste, Yet! Exact but not compete....very intriguing to all readers...thank you....God less

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