Friend Or Foe Poem by hamid kareem

I loved this poem. I really enjoyed the Biblical reference to the betrayal of Jesus by Judas! ~Lacey~

Well written and in this one you have hit the nail on the head with the rythme. A couple of suggestions: In line 10 I would change 'on' to 'upon' as I think it would fit in better with the overall tone and language for the poem. In line 11 I would look for a word to replace 'happiness' as possibly this word is too plain when compared with the language of the rest of the poem. One last thing. The use of punctuation, especially the comma, could make your poems flow a little more smoothly - you may want to read it to yourself and add them where you pause whilst reading. Nice work.

i can relate with the message of this poem...this was wrote very nicely

I can relate, nicely put. after you've vented out in poetry, ...now its time to get them back, haha! (only kidding, of course!) Hmmm...

Great writing, true of life.....10

Sometimes the people who we trust most appear to be our enemies, and betrayal is always painful. Very nice piece: -)

i like this poem it really illustrates the confusion you feel when you are betrayed by a friend its just another great poem of yours keep it up hamid: D

very interesting, in a good way. having a friend betray you isnt fun or good at all. it does hurt, especially when you let that person in, like in you said in your poem. great job. keep it up.

Betrayal by a friend is a painful blow...you have completely portrayed the feeling here...good write...