Haiku: Lullaby Poem by A B Faniki

Haiku: Lullaby

Rating: 5.0


The sound that the rain
makes while beating on my roof
lullaby to me

Saturday, August 31, 2019
Topic(s) of this poem: haiku,life,music,rain,roof,sound
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
8/31/2019 © A B Faniki. All right reseved. I have alwaus been fund of the raining season
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Gajanan Mishra 31 August 2019

Music to ear, great write

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A B Faniki 30 September 2019

Thank you for you kind comment

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Dr Antony Theodore 31 August 2019

The rain drops falling nd the lullaby. very nice comparison dear poet. tony

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Kostas Lagos 31 August 2019

I can hear the music! Excellent!

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A B Faniki 30 September 2019

The music is even more beautiful when the rain is a drizzil. Thanks for your kind words

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Edward Kofi Louis 31 October 2019

Muse! ! Music. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 25 September 2019

A wonderful three liner poem. Great imagery. We can hear the rythym of the rain.

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Bri Edwards 14 September 2019

" Traditional Haiku Structure There are only three lines, totaling 17 syllables. The 1st & 3rd lines have 5 syllables. The second line is 7 syllables. Punctuation and capitalization need not follow the rigid rules used in structuring sentences" i think you have 22 syllables. [in the U.S. aluminium is aluminum (one syllable less!) ] I say this is not haiku, but it's an ok poem. which ear hears " music" ? just one? ? bri ;)

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bri edwards 14 September 2019

" Traditional Haiku Structure There are only three lines, totaling 17 syllables. The 1st & 3rd lines have 5 syllables. The second line is 7 syllables. Punctuation and capitalization need not follow the rigid rules used in structuring sentences" i think you have 22 syllables. [in the U.S. aluminium is aluminum (one syllable less!) ] I say this is not haiku, but it's an ok poem. which ear hears " music" ? just one? ? bri ;)

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Bernard F. Asuncion 10 September 2019

A wonderful write...10+++++

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