Happily Removed Poem by Lawrence S. Pertillar

Happily Removed

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It took quite a while,
Before my space...
Became a peaceful place,
Free and cleansed...
Of confusion I let in!
I had to remove and let go
Of emotional attachments
That kept me distracted...
And detached from me!
A 'me' I had not known existed,
Before I resisted change and growth.
I know what I want.
Now That I am totally undaunted
By fears of rejection and being taunted by doubts.
I found out I can do without deceit.
And self defeating comments critiquing my needs.
Within me they were valid.
That 'are' still!
And...
It took quite a while,
Before my space...
Became a peaceful place,
Free and cleansed...
Of confusion I let in!
And I am not going to begin,
To relive those moments again...
Because I have learned to forgive and forget.
I hope you are not relying on me,
To welcome your growth in my space on your terms?
That didn't work then!
And where my head is now...
Has been completely earned by your undoing
What I thought then could not be undone.
But you proved me wrong.
And I've moved on to reap this peace I am keeping!
It took quite a while,
Before my space...
Became a peaceful place,
Free and cleansed...
Of confusion I let in!
And you are outside of it.
Happily removed like a blood clot...
That stopped the flow of fresh air.
I am not craving to repeat you,
Anywhere in here...
Where I can deeply breathe freely!
I can not see that happening to me,
With you as an 'us'...
Again!
I am in complete recovery.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Emancipation Planz 03 December 2007

'On ya for your complete recovery... please keep penning them One Peace at a Time from that happily removed place... like to meet you there one day...

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Subbaraman N V 03 December 2007

A good poem and a nice message! God bless you!

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Gary Witt 03 December 2007

Mr. Pertillar: Nicely done. I think you've managed to craft this very close to the line between revealing what should be revealed and leaving the rest to the readers' imaginations. Several stand-out lines, but the first among them for me is 'I found out I can do without deceit.' There is no condemnation here, no finger-pointing, perhaps because the deceit was coming from two directions, and had a certain needed (even craved) dependability. There is forgiveness, coupled with a 'lessons learned' attitude that supports forgetting the transgression without forgetting the lesson behind it all. Even feels a little like an anthem. We won't get fooled again, but without Roger Daltry's trademark scream. Many thanks, G

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