Riquetta Elliott

' He's In My Dream '

I am covered in heavy cloth
In peace.
I closed my eyes and
Visioned a friend as in
My lover.
As I dream in the mind, I dream that
He is with me.
As we were in covers, our bodies
Attach.
As I touch him, he touch me.
When I kiss him, he kiss me.
Something amazed that him and I
Was going to make and yes we
Undressed naked.
We were about to begin with the sexual experience,
But the eyes of mine was open.
He was gone.
Then I have a wish of saying I
Wish the presence of my lover who
Called himself a 'Black Fabio' will come
Back into my dreams again.

Poem Submitted: Thursday, January 24, 2008
Poem Edited: Thursday, February 19, 2009

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  • Vipins PuthooranVipins Puthooran (12/25/2011 12:23:00 PM)

    Sweet and wonderful poem///

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  • Fay SlimmFay Slimm (2/24/2009 1:06:00 PM)

    Very inventive and equally well worded - - a good write and a ten from me -- Fay..

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  • Catrina Heart (2/19/2009 10:38:00 AM)

    Beautiful poetic story, you have narrated well...Thanks for the share...10+++

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  • Hebert Logerie Sr.Hebert Logerie Sr. (2/7/2009 10:25:00 PM)

    That's a beautiful poem! A nice story, just check your grammar. I love it, don't give up; keep on writing. Great inspiration!

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  • Riquetta Elliott (2/6/2009 10:15:00 AM)

    You mean one error :)

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  • Keith Hendrickson (1/9/2009 10:49:00 PM)

    very very sweet piece. i liked it

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  • Ashraful MusaddeqAshraful Musaddeq (9/14/2008 10:52:00 AM)

    A sweet dreamy poem. As if I entered into a dream like this piece!

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  • Sarwar ChowdhurySarwar Chowdhury (8/14/2008 4:36:00 AM)

    ...words successfully captured the dream.....10

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  • Thompson Oyonmi (5/22/2008 11:07:00 PM)

    This is a good masterpiece...pretty cool

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  • Jared Ashby (5/21/2008 2:28:00 PM)

    i wonder if hope of the future can be enough.

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  • Lime and Tequila with a Splash of Pineapple (3/5/2008 4:26:00 PM)

    This poem has such a solid, physical presence as I read it, it stimulates the nerve endings.

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  • Sulaiman Mohd YusofSulaiman Mohd Yusof (3/1/2008 1:10:00 AM)

    wishin ya dreams will come tru!

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  • Frank James Ryan Jr...fjrFrank James Ryan Jr...fjr (2/23/2008 7:52:00 PM)

    Commendable work, here, Shia. Creative concept/expression of passion & romance. Mellifluous stanzaec movement, allows for a smooth-fluxed read.Keep that pen of yours pumpin', young lady.


    ~ FjcR ~

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  • _____________________________________ - (2/22/2008 9:45:00 PM)

    Fullest possible expression very original. I see soupcon of T.S Elliot in all the spice that this poem is imbued with Shabash [ Urdu for Atta Boy]

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  • Roger Cornish (2/20/2008 11:30:00 AM)

    Wonderous stuff Riquetta...
    I love...
    'Something amazed that him and I
    Was going to make and yes we was
    Dressed naked.'
    Truly awesome!
    Rogerx.

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  • Thad Wilk (2/18/2008 7:19:00 PM)

    Very nice poem Riquetta! ! May all your dreams come true! ! !
    Best wishes: friend Thad

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  • Jamie-lee Cuerrier (2/3/2008 4:16:00 PM)

    'we was' does not make sense in english. I suggest you take an english course for all of your poems are full of grammatical mistakes. Please refrain from 'correcting' other people's work so pretentiously when you yourself do not know what you're doing. Once you fix all of the grammatical mistakes I'm sure your poems will be fine though =)

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  • John Tiong ChunghooJohn Tiong Chunghoo (1/26/2008 1:09:00 AM)

    dear riquetta,
    it is a very naughty poem. it shows your youthfulness. i wish i could have the enthusiasm to wite poems like this in this stage of my life.

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  • Lawrence S. Pertillar (1/25/2008 10:03:00 PM)

    The concept and honesty is appreciated in this revealing poem you've
    written, Riquetta. It's a good poem.

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  • Alison Cassidy (1/25/2008 2:16:00 AM)

    This is your best poem yet Riquetta. 'I can see him in the mind of dreams.' is superb poetry. You share your dream with honesty and a unique turn of phrase which is no one else's. You certainly whet this reader's appetite for more. Great work. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

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