Hush... And Listen To Love's Sound (Or Dancing In The Shadows) Poem by Eila Mahima Jaipaul

Hush... And Listen To Love's Sound (Or Dancing In The Shadows)

Rating: 5.0


you call to me across the miles
night winds carry the whispers
floating on the breeze
through my windows
falling gently upon my ears
hush... I hear now.

calling from your heaven
glittering stars cannot compare
when you look at me, I am consumed
hush... I see now.

you call through my dreams
dancing in the shadows of my sleep
laughing and loving again
hush... I feel now.

you call to me
every moment of the day
distance couldn't keep us
from destiny which drew us
I'll hold you for eternity
as long as you keep calling.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Eila Mahima Jaipaul 15 November 2005

I am not sure I disagree... though I like the distance and destiny lines in the last stanza... cutting it would make it neat and compact though... hmmm....

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***** ********* 15 November 2005

Eila, I love this but, I feel you could cut the last stanza. I feel now is a fine line to finish on. It's your poem so take no notice of me. Love is definitely something we feel and transcends all boundaries in my book. 10 from hopelessly romantic Tai

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