Valentina Fan

I Dislike You To Be Still - Poem by Valentina Fan

You are a good listener,
Always to be.

Typhoon's approaching,
Avalanche's thundering,
Aurora polaris' pulsing,
You are listening to me.

You listened quietly,
While my stories' teling,
While my bitter complaining,
While my tears' lasting a long long century.

You listened my balderdash of hallucination,
My abracadabra of trepidation,
My days of withering tea-leaves,
My watch hand pricking dawn dreams.

You listened my hair flows,
My shoulder quivers,
My stomach wrings,
My heart twinges.

Like the air around me,
Too good a listener are you.
As if I sang to a dim dark valley
Which would never echo.

But how can I say,
I do not like you,
I do not like you to be still.

Topic(s) of this poem: love and friendship

Comments about I Dislike You To Be Still by Valentina Fan

  • Abekah Emmanuel (6/10/2017 6:48:00 AM)

    wonderful piece.

    Am impressed by your choice of expressing your feelings through a blank verse.
    Obviously, the longing and feeling for your friend or 'lover' is so tensed that you have little time for rhymes, and this reflects in how your stanzas are structured.

    The use of 'big' vocabulary and onomatopoeic words add amazing touch to the poem, just like the classical allusion 'aurora' adds beautiful reference to it.

    In all, is a beautiful poem. Keep writing!
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  • Anil Kumar Panda (11/11/2015 9:21:00 AM)

    Lovely poetry. Smooth sailing and nice wording. Liked it. (Report) Reply

  • The chinmay (11/11/2015 12:51:00 AM)

    nice choosing of word..wonderful written..great work thnx 4 sharing.. (Report) Reply

  • (11/10/2015 1:18:00 PM)

    I can sense the patience, the waiting, the longing...for something to happen. The fifth stanza is perfect. Great poem. (Report) Reply

  • Mohammed Asim Nehal (11/9/2015 5:20:00 AM)

    Heartfelt poem........
    But how can I say,
    I do not like you,
    I do not like you to be still.
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    Valentina Fan (11/9/2015 8:09:00 AM)

    Thank you ~~~ :)

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Poem Submitted: Monday, November 9, 2015

Poem Edited: Friday, November 13, 2015

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