I Laid My Heart Bare, But Poem by Aniruddha Pathak

I Laid My Heart Bare, But

Rating: 5.0


I laid my heart bare
At starry strings there,
Unmoved blank that stare.
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Haiku | 02.04.13 |

Saturday, August 31, 2019
Topic(s) of this poem: stars
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
With keen eyes we stare at starry strings observing as if from a central gallery of the universe. But indifference is all we read from them. It often hurts our ego that we and our earth are too small a thing in the universe.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Kumarmani Mahakul 31 August 2019

Brilliant haiku with nice ideology. It is good to have the Poet's Note below which helps to understand the theme of the poem. Nice work.

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Aniruddha Pathak 01 September 2019

Thank you dear KM. I take now a deep breath for being on the same page as I on giving Poet's Notes..

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 31 August 2019

A beautiful thought that gives insight. Very perceptive and great imagery. I concur with the Poet's Notes. But how about a falling star?

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Aniruddha Pathak 01 September 2019

Thank you for the feedback, Rose. But how about a falling star? (Report) ... I am not sure what you mean. And the falling star or the shooting ones as we call, are no stars. They're only small asteroids which get pulled by Earth's gravitation and are destroyed before reaching the surface. But yes, a poet can call them a star, he/she has all sorts of licence. I'm sure you've some new angle to it that I can't see.

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Sylvia Frances Chan 31 August 2019

Excellent Haiku. It touched my heart, so well said in such brevity. Thought provoking in its being, this haiku. Your poet notes has contributed to my understanding this excellent Haiku. God's Blessings. A 10 Full Score

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Aniruddha Pathak 01 September 2019

Goofed up, .. not preventing, but rather directing/inducing the reader to think in one direction...

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Aniruddha Pathak 01 September 2019

Thanks, your feedback is very elating. I always wonder if I should add port's notes, but then add them still. The poet's interpretation is one, the reader can still have a different one. Often by giving such notes the poet might be unwittingly preventing the reader to think only in one direction. Is it fair? You are a discerning poet, I'd love to have your feedback.

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Godhra - Gujarat
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