I Love You Poem by Sarun Stani
I Love You
Over the earth, black clouds roaring
Like beasts, but my ears listening
To the finest beat of my heart;
Those thunder bolts unfamiliar to me.
My room dark and silent
And by a taper lit i sit.
Her face cute as a moon,
I can see above those I.C engines
In my book.
'Your rosy cheeks, those eyes
Like stars lit,
My sweet heart, my dear love
No more can i hide away
My feelings to you.
I love you..
'It's time, it's time'my mind saying.
Let us flee!
To her heart and see if
There a space for us to stay.
Come on dear me;
And let your first words be-
'Don't know if mine is a wrong passion..'
Love is a soldier fighting for glory,
For the heaven in the earth.
Today she is alive, but on the morrow, dead
May be....
The poem you've written is filled with much content and leads. I've read the other comments but still two topics fill my mind about the poem. Firstly the use of punctuation(edits included in there) and also how to change the face of the poem by raising it to another level. Will you rest on your laurels or take another look and go for excellence? Best
another excellent poem.........better love poem than most i have read...... good work.......... ;)
'over the earth black clouds roaring ' 'like beasts, but my ears listening' feelings are good depicted.well written 10+++
i agree with both previous comments, just tell her beacuse some day you might lose her forever and love is about taking chances no matter the ending consequences may be. it was very nice. stephanie
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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Dont think about morrow, she is alive now, just open your heart and say 'You Love Her' Good write Rgds Nooruddeen