Vaughn Bekker

Rookie - 0 Points (26 march 1972 / Empangeni)

I`m Dying Slowly-My Desperate Plea - Poem by Vaughn Bekker

Even though you hurt me, I you forgive
I am the only reason that you live
My pulse now weakens with every day
Stop killing me, this I pray
With so much love I do you support
But all you do is cut my life short
If there was ever balance it was made by me
But you have upset it, can’t you see
Many things I’ve given you to set you free
But instead you choose, you are killing me
Without me you can`t carry on
No matter what you did, you would not last long
With so much violence you taunt my soul
You burrow inside just like a mole
The things created long ago, no longer there
The pain I’m feeling is becoming too much to bare
From deep inside you suck me dry
And with your toxic fumes you pollute my sky
All around me the trees they wither
As you carve them down with every slither
I ask you I beg, I’m on my knees
You are killing me, stop it please
You fill my veins with toxic things
The end result only tragedy brings
My moods are changing, can`t you see
That by your actions you are killing me
I`ve given birth to so many beautiful things
But now mostly only pain it brings
I desperate message to you I send
Stop killing me, it`ll be your end
My body exploited by I don`t know who
O wait I see now, I think it`s you
The time is coming to draw my final breath
For all to stop and accept my death
Such a beautiful place that I have made
My only wish is that I could have stayed
I was here long before your birth
But now I’m dying slowly, your planet earth

Comments about I`m Dying Slowly-My Desperate Plea by Vaughn Bekker

  • (5/23/2010 9:35:00 AM)

    a very nice point of viewing this earth. Great.. (Report) Reply

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  • (5/21/2010 12:59:00 PM)

    This poem really suprises me....its deep and interesting..Very well written and If spoke in words would be sooo amazing (Report) Reply

  • (5/21/2010 12:07:00 AM)

    this is an amazing poem its soo deep and real. i love it your amazing i would love to be able to write something that deep. (Report) Reply

  • (5/18/2010 2:33:00 PM)

    great poem......the first couple of lines give the impression its about a break-up but then you realise its actually about mother earth... (Report) Reply

  • (5/17/2010 10:43:00 AM)

    this really good poem i like it alot i feel like dying slowly (Report) Reply

  • (5/14/2010 6:19:00 PM)

    I like the rhythm of your poem. Also, its structure like a wide and straight road leads to the 'lover' person. And of course, the subject is very much actual. Very good writing! (Report) Reply

  • (5/14/2010 3:40:00 PM)

    Well-written...very fluent indeed. (Report) Reply

  • (5/14/2010 2:11:00 AM)

    Great twist ending. Alot of my stuff has twists, too, but this a better one than any of mine, I think.8/10 (Report) Reply

  • (5/13/2010 3:10:00 PM)

    Fluent verses concerning the pollution and other environmental problems. Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • (5/13/2010 11:43:00 AM)

    this poem is amazing i loved it a lot your a really good poet keet up the good poem hope to read more from yuou (Report) Reply

  • (5/13/2010 6:59:00 AM)

    And that's it in the end...the planet earth...good
    And to your message...i wouldn't have enjoyed you slowly dying for sure...but i enjoyed your poem..lively...10
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  • Michelle Freeman (5/10/2010 2:05:00 PM)

    I really felt this pain in my chest and at first (like Brandi) I did think it was about a painful break-up then I thought it was about work or family. Only in the end did I understand, and I was shocked at the overwhelming desire that came over me to apologise to Earth for all the wrongs I have committed against Her.

    This was powerful, keep on going.
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  • (5/9/2010 5:34:00 PM)

    This sounded to me as a lover`s plea, I admit, I did not get it until the end. With it read in its entirety, I hear a strong voice speaking in proxy for mother earth. Meaningfull and direct was your message and I appreciate it. (Report) Reply

  • (5/9/2010 6:58:00 AM)

    I like your poem. It's fantastic. Well, you are really good in this. It is really touching. (Report) Reply

  • (5/4/2010 6:22:00 PM)

    reminds me of a love poem written by a ex. 'Even though you hurt me, I you forgive
    I am the only reason that you live'
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  • (5/4/2010 12:02:00 AM)

    I like the peice in here when u talk about u gave birth to many beautiful things but they bring pain i agree a whole lot! (Report) Reply

  • Dakota Ellerton (5/2/2010 8:02:00 PM)

    I really enjoyed reading this, nicely done :) (Report) Reply

  • (5/2/2010 5:46:00 PM)

    That was very well written! Your rhyme scheme is about the same as mine, but great job: ] (Report) Reply

  • Ershad Mazumder (5/2/2010 10:52:00 AM)

    Thanks. Your expression is really very good. Its full of feelings. I do not like to say anything about spellings and selection of words. I shall read more in future. (Report) Reply

  • (4/26/2010 9:14:00 AM)

    one word beautiful, i love this one. well written, keep it up (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, April 25, 2010

Poem Edited: Sunday, April 25, 2010

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