I'M Incomplete Poem by Alex waters

I'M Incomplete

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I’m incomplete.
I know it’s true.
But I have my feet
To get to you.

It is such a bitter test;
The time has come to go.
I shall head due west,
Though the lands are low.

I travel light
To keep the pace,
Through the night
Continuing the race.

Day one finds the past
And I release a sigh.
But my hopes should last,
So long as I stay dry.

I’m again pursued by doubt,
Now that day seven has found me.
Quite a ways for just one route,
But I still travel soundly.

But walking feet grow sore,
And weariness is at its best.
I will travel little more
Before I find my rest.

Then just as I feared,
To add to the pain,
The sun disappeared,
And I drank of the rain.

But I lift my head
And keep you on my mind.
My life lies ahead,
Though I left it all behind.

Now this river divides the way.
I slowly swim closer to death,
As I frantically begin to pray,
And desperately gasp for breath.

What a foolish thing to begin,
A victim of my passion.
Unmasking once again,
Cupid as the assassin.

But the river was not too deep,
Nor the bear to strong.
The mountain was not to steep,
And now I will not be long.

So now I run,
And with such haste,
Chasing the sun,
Keeping time from waste.

Traveling from shore to shore,
Making my way to this home,
Knocking from door to door,
Only to find, I’m all alone.

Are my lover’s eyes blind?
Or is there no pair that true love can combine?

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Rory Hudson 28 February 2009

The rhythm is a bit off in parts. The ending leaves things hanging unresolved - of course, perhaps that's what you wanted.

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Barry A. Lanier 24 February 2009

I enjoyed the lpight and the intensity of the journey and I'm sure I missed out somewhere....but exactly what happened at the end? help me to understand you crescendo?

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Ernest Lee Clary 18 February 2009

what a quest for love- very good another ten

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Greenwolfe 1962 17 February 2009

This is a magnificent piece of work. What a poem! It shall be one of my favorites because it was presented masterfully. Great rhythm and rhyme. Something I rarely see. Tremendous story as well. A rarity indeed. I loved every bit of this. Wonderful! GW62

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