I Met You (English Sonnet) Poem by Gert Strydom

I Met You (English Sonnet)

Rating: 5.0


(for Annelize)

I met you on a bright hot summer day,
your smile was radiant; your eyes did gleam,
I do not remember what you did say,
you were the woman, of whom I did dream,

your voice was sweet and your gaze did mine meet,
your presence did me unsettle and me stun,
as if I was the one that you do complete:
the one destined for sadness and fun.

Maybe something lacks in my memory,
your fragrance was fresh and also timeless
but I still do you in my mind's-eye see:
you were much more beautiful than just this.

Right here I might be tonight too direct
but on me you still have this same effect.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Form Verifier 16 May 2022

Better than your usual mediocre effort, BUT line 7 is missing a syllable and line 8 has an extra syllable. Overuse of 'do' and 'did'. Is not iambic and has no flow.

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Jayne Davies 15 May 2022

Beautiful. Lovely words.

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Caustic Critic 16 May 2022

Nonsense!

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Gert Strydom

Johannesburg, South Africa
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