I Met You (English Sonnet) Poem by Gert Strydom

I Met You (English Sonnet)

Rating: 5.0


(for Annelize)

I met you on a bright hot summer day,
your smile was radiant; your eyes did gleam,
I do not remember what you did say,
you were the woman, of whom I did dream,

your voice was sweet and your gaze did mine meet,
your presence did me unsettle and me stun,
as if I was the one that you do complete:
the one destined for sadness and fun.

Maybe something lacks in my memory,
your fragrance was fresh and also timeless
but I still do you in my mind's-eye see:
you were much more beautiful than just this.

Right here I might be tonight too direct
but on me you still have this same effect.

Sunday, May 15, 2022
Topic(s) of this poem: fun,sonnet
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Form Verifier 16 May 2022

Better than your usual mediocre effort, BUT line 7 is missing a syllable and line 8 has an extra syllable. Overuse of 'do' and 'did'. Is not iambic and has no flow.

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Jayne Davies 15 May 2022

Beautiful. Lovely words.

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Caustic Critic 16 May 2022

Nonsense!

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Gert Strydom

Gert Strydom

Johannesburg, South Africa
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