Adam McKim

Rookie - 222 Points (11/12/1984)

I Promise You (Trijan Refrain) - Poem by Adam McKim

Oh love of mine, Oh love of mine,
Come to me in this day,
I'll save you from this world's opine
These judgements I will slay.
I'll hold you in my arms so tight
And shield our love with all my might...
I promise you
I promise you
Oh love of mine, I'll always fight.

Oh love of mine, Oh love of mine,
I'll always keep you warm,
Through thick and thin, it will be fine
I'll shield you from the storm.
Through all the battles and the wars
No matter their rank or their scores...
I promise you
I promise you
To keep love strong, what's mine and yours.

Oh love of mine, Oh love of mine,
I'll fight this to the end,
I'll put myself on the front line
To be there to defend.
I'll never let them take our love
This gift was given from above...
I promise you
I promise you
Our love they'll never deprive of.

Poet's Notes about The Poem

This style of poetry is called the Trijan Refrain. It's my first one of this style.

The rhyme scheme is a/b/a/b/c/c/d, d refrain /c

The meter is 8/6/8/6/8/8/4,4 refrain /8

Comments about I Promise You (Trijan Refrain) by Adam McKim

  • Connor Whyte (8/14/2012 10:13:00 PM)

    This goes to show that you have a huge grip on what love is and means not many people can express love quite as clear as this its beautiful. (Report) Reply

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  • Marcus Mckinley (8/13/2012 12:01:00 AM)

    i have to agree with Ellias. this poem is well structured and methodically penned. (Report) Reply

  • Mark Normand (8/12/2012 12:46:00 PM)

    Yes we will do anything for love.We have to or we will go crazy. Love can be so nice and then turn on you to cause you great pain. The jealousy is the worst.The things I have done out of jealously are crazy.. Good poem (Report) Reply

  • Valerie Dohren (8/12/2012 6:47:00 AM)

    Lovely poem, very romantic and well structured. (Report) Reply

  • (8/12/2012 5:27:00 AM)

    Like it, a great poem with a beautiful flow. (Report) Reply

  • Ellias Anderson Jr. (8/12/2012 4:42:00 AM)

    This poem is very good because of two aspects:
    1_ the meaning is so clear and perfect, you know it as well that we should protect our love and the thing that we love from the things that may threat them. It's so important to deliver the message and you did it in a nice way here
    2_ the structure that you used is familiar to me. This structure shows that the poet is so talented and perfect at his job! Let me use the word build here, you build your poem in a nice way
    Over all, this work is so nice, lovely and romantic! I give 10 out of 10 to this perfect work of art
    Well done!
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Poem Submitted: Saturday, August 11, 2012

Poem Edited: Saturday, December 1, 2012

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