In Quiet Submission Poem by Lawrence S. Pertillar
In Quiet Submission
My ambassador questing days are done!
Attempting to knit a quilt with benefits...
Does not best sit with everyone,
Warming as they do under one Sun!
Nor should I try to mend lost strands of chaos!
This mix will never blend.
There's too much fighting a weave they can transcend.
All that is rumored what peace could begin!
But this pattern appears too complexed,
For minds far perplexed to see...
How these pieces fit in to release,
And all could live troubled free!
'Father...
Don't be so hard on yourself!
Perhaps your tactics should be reintroduced,
With less serious content.
And more flair and pizzazz! '
I thought you came for prayer, My son?
In quiet submission? Do it! Quietly...
That means...no lip!
'I'm 'trying', Father!
But You are disturbing my concentration!
And I am being overwhelmed!
They'll get the message.
Eventually!
I did! '
Pray, My son!
And 'allow' ME to deliver YOUR tasks!
Nick, I so appreciate your comments! I thank you! Best wishes... L
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5/11/2024 12:52:57 PM # 1.0.0.1119
The narrative of this is excellent, supported by a well constructed framework. The flow is wonderfuland thelanguage - the opening line is truly imaginative - is used to strong effect. There seems to be a religious feel to this; reverentual. The feeling from the opening line onwards is one of reliving: some might think it a rebirth; a rejection of a set of ideas yet without replacement. The second line is a stunner; here the narrative seems to be saying thatissues of peace are wrong or at least the gestures towards peace are wrong. Whatever, this is a strong poem Lawrence. I enjoyed it a lot.