'Intimate Intention' Poem by Marvin Brato Sr

'Intimate Intention'



Moment...
I saw you
walked that day
it seemed to me
a sudden magic
lit my being
which gave
inspiration
and courage
to approached
and befriended you.

Seconds...
later I met you
face to face
and you were
kind to me
even smiled
that shown
your pretty
countenance
which drove
me to admire you.

Soon enough...
we got acquainted
and realized
that we were
in love with
each other
that lead the way
to innate romance
which enthused joy
and later made love
we now cherish.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Gina Onyemaechi 19 May 2012

Hi there, Thanks for your comment on my poem. As for your piece, the sentiment is nice, but the expression needs to be more poetic. I hope you don't mind me saying so. Best wishes, Gina.

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Marvin Brato Sr

Marvin Brato Sr

Davao City, Philippines
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