Dan Jordan


Life In The Trenches

Poem by Dan Jordan

Shells are exploding
Rapidly above my trench,
They blow themselves to
Pieces with all of the
Enemies hatred and rage.
The tremendous blast is
Overwhelming; my ears
can not cope with the
Exploding rage; gloomy,
Deep red blood is beginning
To pour out from my
Shell-shocked ear drums.

It is impossible to avoid the
Horror-stricken sight of
One of my mates wailing
And screaming in agony, as
They die a very slow and cumbersome
Death.

My colonel shouted, “Into no man's land you go! ”
There's no time to prepare for the hell of a battle
Which awaits me. I feel a shudder of anxiety
Tingle down my spine; as the dark and mysterious
Shadows of no man's land hang solemnly above
My trench, and into the depths of the murky
And eerie mud below.

I must put all of those terrible and
Patronising thoughts and sights aside,
For it is my destiny to climb
Over the flesh shredding barbed wire,
And venture deep into no man's land.


Comments about Life In The Trenches by Dan Jordan

  • Fortnite fan (11/17/2018 2:13:00 PM)

    Poem was very nice and inspiring for me as well
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  • Kassem OudeKassem Oude (12/23/2008 1:38:00 PM)

    Very well written. Why should we fight in no man's land? Is it not better to share land and resource and live in peace? ! Aren't we brothers in humanity and God's sons?(Report)Reply

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  • Louis RamsLouis Rams (12/21/2008 3:26:00 PM)

    this puts you into the foxholes of war.
    very good write.(Report)Reply

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  • Ivor Hogg (12/21/2008 3:19:00 PM)

    you paint a realistic picture(Report)Reply

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  • Annie Girl (12/21/2008 2:43:00 PM)

    really nice it just keeps getting better and better :)(Report)Reply

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  • Dee Daffodil (12/21/2008 9:11:00 AM)

    Very descriptive poem Dan! You take us to the battlefield! The quelling of one's fear is so well described...the need to continue, despite everything going on around this soldier, is very well depicted! Great job!
    Hugs,
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  • Luis Alvarado (12/19/2008 1:31:00 AM)

    All of the hell our soldiers go thru while on the battle field and we treat them like second-class citizens when they return with the experience still fresh in their minds. The trenches that they experience the worst are the trenches they go thru when they come back home. Let's not treat our VETERANS this way! !(Report)Reply

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  • Aaron Combs (12/18/2008 2:00:00 PM)

    Nice write, WWI scenario i should i guess, right?

    Very Good Write! !

    I liked it because it was real episode of life itself, for it was all but deadly and dangerous living in the trenches.(Report)Reply

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  • Amber Lamb (12/18/2008 8:32:00 AM)

    I love the concept of soldiers belonging in no man's land, or is it every man's land?(Report)Reply

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  • Ron Flowers (12/17/2008 5:30:00 PM)

    Very good. It removes the glamour of war and replaces it with a much truer picture.

    Keep writing
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  • Angelica Boyce (12/17/2008 4:09:00 PM)

    This is amazing! i love it! it's great!
    i really truley love it. keep writeing, ur very good!

    - angelica(Report)Reply

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  • Beautifully Unknown (12/17/2008 3:16:00 PM)

    I truely love this! ! ! Honestly it makes me feel like I'm right there in battle along side some of the best. truely amazing! ! !(Report)Reply

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  • Justin Walker (12/17/2008 3:13:00 PM)

    i like it cuz life is exactly like trenches. there is drama (bombs) , enemies (enemies) , fights (war) , and there will be atleast one person that will die of different things. and drugs or something else that is very different would to me be no man's land because you never kno wat could happen(Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, December 16, 2008

Poem Edited: Wednesday, December 17, 2008