The Gold Of Smauge Poem by Dan Jordan

Dan this has earned a 10 from me because you have put into it some serious thinking and have arranged your verses in acceptable order too.... it needs a little editing in places so I suggest you read over carefully and spot the spelling corrections..... we all have to do that Dan. - and I often find a typing error which I am always pleased to correct because I care for my readers.... they need good and well written poetry...... but you must keep on writing and please do read as much poetry as you can of others.......... best wishes from Fay.

Good ideas nicely penned down. I agree with Fay so far as editing is concerned that will give your poem a better shine. CP

this poem was fantastic made me think about the theme of the poem not to mention there are multiple themes as I thought harder so I really love this poem 10/10

My friend. I think your work rock. what I like most, is that it comes from a 15 year old.. Fay may be right.. Take Her advice. But you are young and this is a learning thing.. So never Quit, never give-up.. never give - in and you would win this.. Bless Leslie

I like this poem very much. Could you please explain to me what makes you think of these ideas. I took this poem and understoood it as I'm trying to find something beautiful and rich, that is deep and hidden that is underneath ugly and scary things. But how do you take it?

Very good I think this is a very good poem that is not understood by all

A good write, wording is splendid.

good write it makes you realize that you must continue until you find the light at the end of the tunnel.

awsome...... this is good.....

I enjoy the imagery and allegory of this one, Dan! There's a timeless quality to this work that can be applied to the current financial woes instigated by the Rothschild empire of money-changing shenanigans. Great job on this poem, Dan! Warm regards, John.