nouri black

Lonely In The Dark

I am living in the darkness
I feel so scared
I feel unsafe
I dont know what to do
I cry everyday and night
And I feel that I want to cry more and more
Non stop
It really dark here
I hear my mom voice
But I cant reach her
And I hear my friends calling me
But they cant hear me
I dont know what to do
I start screaming and screaming
But suddenly their voices r gone
They leave me all alone in the darkness
I start crying again and again
And suddenly
A light so weak appears, shivering in the dark
I didnt know what it was
I feel so endangered
I saw an extended hand
That wants to grab me towards its unrevealed body
I ran away
I hear a male vioce
Calling my name
Telling me that he wants to save me
I turn and look at him
I thought he was just like an angel
Just like an angel in a human body
With flesh and blood
He took my hand
To show me the way
When I was out of the dark
He gave me a butterfly
He gave me a butterfly
And with it
He filled my heart with hope
Gave me a reason to never give up
Just knowing that some one,
Somewhere
Actually cared about me,
Loved me
That will give me all the strength i need to live
To survive

Poem Submitted: Monday, November 27, 2006
Poem Edited: Saturday, November 27, 2010

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  • Adeeb AlfatehAdeeb Alfateh (6/20/2019 1:45:00 AM)

    I didnt know what it was
    I feel so endangered
    I saw an extended hand
    That wants to grab me towards its unrevealed body
    I ran away
    I hear a male vioce
    Calling my name

    superb expression

    great 10+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++

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  • Josh Dunbar (4/3/2018 9:39:00 AM)

    But suddenly their voices r gone (line 15) , ok seriously do i really even have to explain why this is wrong? using texting language in a piece that you make is just unprofessional and distracting to the reader, is it really that hard just to type out the word are? you cant even try and defend yourself by blaming it on syllables or rhythm.
    Just knowing that some one, (line 40) , in this example the author spelt someone as some one when it is clear that was not there intention.

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  • Josh Dunbar (4/3/2018 9:38:00 AM)

    It really dark here (line 8) , In this example the word It should be replaced with It's
    I hear my mom voice (line 9) , In this line from the poem makes no sense, the way that its written leads the reader to believe that the author is hearing their own voice, and if I'm not mistaken that is not what the poet wanted to portray.

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  • Josh Dunbar (4/3/2018 9:36:00 AM)

    Ok before people start raging at me I'd like to say that I respect poets and all the hard work they put into their poems. However from my perspective it seems almost as if this poem was written by an unprofessional teenager who was to lazy to edit and correct their mistakes. To support my point here is a list of a few of the mistakes:

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  • a moment of sadness (2/12/2007 2:02:00 AM)

    this is a very spiritual and revealing poem...
    i love your openess

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  • poetry lover (2/9/2007 4:04:00 PM)

    I loved this one very heart felt, we all feel like we are alone at times but with god we are never alone he is always with us.

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  • Allenika ... (2/8/2007 1:29:00 PM)

    I went through this too, Jesus found me. i feel what you mean.

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  • Paul Marshall (2/8/2007 1:00:00 PM)

    Nice. I'm going through the same feelings. Fortunately I found a friend to help me throught this hard time.

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  • Maxim Muyu (1/14/2007 10:13:00 AM)

    fine writing about lonerliness, fear and darkness.Maxim Muyu

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  • Alfredo Jacques (1/13/2007 3:52:00 AM)

    I know exactly how you feel. great poem.

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  • Hazem Al JaberHazem Al Jaber (12/11/2006 9:05:00 AM)

    stunning feelings which came through a warm words..
    keep up..
    you seems to be a great poet..
    yours
    hazem

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  • The Poet In Pain (12/8/2006 7:48:00 AM)

    Amazing poem, i loved it, keep writing id like to read more of yours

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  • Duncan Wyllie (12/5/2006 2:26:00 PM)

    Beautiful writing so full of empathy and compassion, awesome words
    Love duncan X

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  • Not a member No 4 (12/3/2006 9:47:00 AM)

    With love and recognition we can conquer all. Good concept Nouri. A a very good and positive start. Keep writing. jim

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  • Hazem Al JaberHazem Al Jaber (12/1/2006 7:09:00 AM)

    nice one, , and good start.. wish you more..
    yours
    hazem

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  • Brian DornBrian Dorn (11/30/2006 9:25:00 AM)

    Beautiful ending, Nouri... a nice transition from darkness to light. Keep writing!
    Brian

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  • Bobbie Jean Wright (11/28/2006 6:43:00 PM)

    Nouri...this is a very deep and emotional piece. Very good imagery. I could feel your pain and your yearning and I hope you find solace soon. : o) Bobbie

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  • Roger Bowman (11/27/2006 11:08:00 AM)

    Nouri I'll come and get u from the dark, cause I am the knight of the light.
    I'll show you the way to happiness but then I have to go to save another soul from the dark brotherhood.

    Take care
    Roger

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