Noreen Carden

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Lost Summer Song - Poem by Noreen Carden

He flew in with the first days of summer
His black wings shone.
His beautiful notes filled
my day with sweetness.
He brought his lady love for me to greet.
She being shy hid beneath my fuchsia
while he scratched in the clay by my feet
carrying treats for her in his yellow beak.
A tight little nest they fashioned.
Safe between the rose bush thorns.
I found her little body
Among the marigolds one morn.
Her love sat among the eaves
over and over his grieving
call rang out.
Next day I found him where
his love had lain
An eerie silence fell upon my patch.
His trilling voice extinguished
his broken heart forever stilled.
And four blue speckled eggs
that now will never hatch

Topic(s) of this poem: tragedy

Form: Ballad


Poet's Notes about The Poem

This happened last year in my garden he was a cheeky little chap who seemed to have no fear of me he would dig for worms right between my feet as I worked in my garden. I mourned the death of his little family that summer.

Comments about Lost Summer Song by Noreen Carden

  • Daniel Brick (7/15/2015 11:33:00 PM)


    I surrendered completely to the sentiments of this poem. The dimensions of the tragedy it records may be small but they are R-E-A-L. I experienced a parallel story this past June. A pair of finches built a nest on my balcony in late May and I had to share the balcony with them. The male was very insistent. But a larger bird attacked the nest one weekend I was out of town, because the female was dead in the nest and the eggs pillaged. The male flew in wide circles over my balcony and perched on the railing for over a week. Then he disappeared. I have not found the words to express my version of our common story. I applaud you for being able to tell yours. The birds deserve our lament. Do you know Walt Whitman's OUT OF THE CRADLE ROCKING ENDLESSLY. Look for it. It tells our story with the fullness of his stunning poetic genius. Delius set it to music as SEA DRIFT, a work of heart breaking loveliness. (Report) Reply

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  • Bri Edwards (5/23/2015 8:56:00 PM)


    I have a great sentence I could leave to try to get a laugh, BUT I know this is not appropriate. even bri knows THAT!
    a well told tale of loss among Nature’s creatures.

    my favorite lines:

    “She being shy hid beneath my fuchsia
    while he scratched in the clay by my feet
    carrying treats for her in his yellow beak”

    AND:

    “An eerie silence fell upon my patch.
    His trilling voice extinguished”

    to MyPoemList. bri :)

    and thanks for the poet's notes.
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  • (3/19/2015 7:19:00 PM)


    Such a beautiful poem Noreen, your a talented lady. (Report) Reply

  • Khairul Ahsan (3/14/2015 11:03:00 PM)


    Wow, what a wonderful expression of poignant thoughts! Very sad indeed. I had a somewhat similar experience last Summer. A black bulbul bird laid three small, speckled eggs in the money plant tub hanging in my balcony. I used to watch the little bird come and hatch the eggs. Unaware, one day my servant watered the tub in a routine chore. Thereafter, the eggs remained there, but the bird flew no more. I felt so sorry and guilty!
    The title of your poem is aptly a precursor to the poem.
    'His trilling voice extinguished
    his broken heart forever stilled.' - The title gives a hint of this.
    'And four blue speckled eggs
    that now will never hatch' - What a pity!
    And thanks for the Poet's Notes.
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  • (3/3/2015 4:10:00 PM)


    This is so very beautiful and something as a human I can relate to in full. Wonderful. (Report) Reply

  • (3/3/2015 9:35:00 AM)


    A very poignant tale, so well crafted. Nature can sometimes seem so cruel, Noreen. I look forward each year to see the swallows come back. After them flying thousands of miles to last year's nesting site one of them will sometimes (very rarely) die. Very sad! Well worth waiting for, Noreen. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, March 3, 2015



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