Noreen Carden

Bronze Star - 2,434 Points (16/12/50 / Mayo)

The Person We See

Poem by Noreen Carden

Grey wispy hair pokes through her hat
Waddling homeward on worn down heels
Carrying bags that hit and bump
on legs as they hurry through city streets

Sitting alone in her cold flat
She dreams by the fire of days long gone
When she was looked at not just seen
When she was pretty and young and strong

Once she wore silk against her skin
Heads would turn as she walked in
Her opinion was sought and acted upon
Her smile could cause a soul to yearn
That was in the long ago when friends
were plenty and troubles few
Now people look but never see
The person that she used to be


Poet's Notes about The Poem

I wrote this after talking to a lovely older lady in a doctor s waiting room

Comments about The Person We See by Noreen Carden

  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (5/25/2017 2:57:00 PM)

    four years and i'm back and enjoyed it once again.

    i've had it in MyPoemList and now shall put it into my/our June 2017 showcase for PH poets, along with your Poet's Notes. your name will be along with the poem and i'll let you know when poems are ready for viewing; i'll probably send the showcase to you.

    let me know if you object or if you have questions. i hope you are not banging your legs too much these days!

    Thanks.

    bri :)(Report)Reply

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  • Gary HGary H (8/6/2015 8:05:00 PM)

    Awesome as always! Love it indeed.(Report)Reply

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  • Kelly KurtKelly Kurt (4/11/2015 4:57:00 PM)

    A sad but beautiful poem, Noreen. I know the feeling. Thank you for sharing
    Peace(Report)Reply

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  • Brian StaffordBrian Stafford (3/5/2015 3:21:00 PM)

    excellent poem, paints a vivid picture! well done!(Report)Reply

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  • Pranab K ChakrabortyPranab K Chakraborty (2/21/2015 11:58:00 PM)

    Well illustrated time by age past and present. Nice watercolor, canvas shown a different thrust of passion by heart.(Report)Reply

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  • Kim BarneyKim Barney (2/21/2015 6:08:00 PM)

    Wonderful poem, Noreen. I think this is one of your best. Congratulations on having it chosen as Poem of the Day. I have voted it a ten.
    By the way, did I ever tell you that you are mentioned in my poem POETRY HEAVEN?(Report)Reply

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  • Hazel DurhamHazel Durham (2/21/2015 3:36:00 PM)

    I love this superb write that is so true as our past disappears before our eyes as we grow old but our memories live on and we should be still of value for our great wisdom!
    Congratulations Noreen for great poem of the day!(Report)Reply

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  • Bernard SnyderBernard Snyder (2/21/2015 1:03:00 PM)

    Very well-written poem. It is funny how people view others. Congrats...well-deserved poem of the day!(Report)Reply

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  • Brian StaffordBrian Stafford (2/21/2015 7:54:00 AM)

    very good, well done!(Report)Reply

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  • Jak Black (11/11/2014 6:07:00 AM)

    Now people look but never see
    The person that she used to be............................

    Another great poem Noreen. Another strong message. Wonderful.(Report)Reply

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  • Daniel BrickDaniel Brick (5/8/2014 8:20:00 PM)

    This is an unsentimental look at ageing - Yeats's Cast a cold eye. The amazing result is that it filled with genuine sentiment, nothing forced on the reader, nothing artificial. As I read it I felt the person we see is also the person we are. (If I were reading this poem in my 20s my reaction would be much different!) You describe A Day in the Life of - type scenario, in which living goes forward and memories stay put. Whether those memories cause bitterness or relief depends on the individual. I like to think this woman is well balanced and is ageing with dignity, if not grace. But I don't deny her grace! !(Report)Reply

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  • Gary HGary H (12/20/2013 3:20:00 AM)

    This is really good.: -)(Report)Reply

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  • Khairul AhsanKhairul Ahsan (12/14/2013 9:43:00 AM)

    @ Roseann Shawiak and Valsa George,
    I liked both of your comments.(Report)Reply

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  • Valsa GeorgeValsa George (11/22/2013 1:03:00 AM)

    With the passage of time, our looks and appearance undergo rapid changes. When young and influential, friends surround and acceptance come our way! But when old age advances, friends dwindle and we have to sit lonely by the fire side, nostalgically reflecting good old times! Enjoyed this great write! !(Report)Reply

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  • Adeline FosterAdeline Foster (10/21/2013 4:36:00 PM)

    Great poem, tell me about it. Read mine - Who Am i -
    Adeline(Report)Reply

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  • Smoky HossSmoky Hoss (10/16/2013 3:20:00 PM)

    ah, but truly she still is; excellent, vivid story-telling, great to read!(Report)Reply

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  • Roseann Shawiak (10/6/2013 2:55:00 AM)

    So true to life. Have experienced it myself, feeling invisible to the living. Not being seen as the person I used to be except when people read my poetry. In poems I am seen in the words I write, yet, I am never seen for who I truly am even then. Good solid poem, I like it a lot. Thank you for sharing it. RoseAnn(Report)Reply

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  • Hazel DurhamHazel Durham (9/25/2013 7:50:00 AM)

    Sad and thought provoking in a beautful portrait of an lovely older lady!(Report)Reply

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  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (9/16/2013 6:31:00 PM)

    some aspects of the used-to-be person are probably there.......perhaps some of the better aspects. but i know what you mean. of course i'm not referring to ME! at 65, i'm still pretty [handsome] and young [at heart] and strong [enough]. i feel sorry for the normal people! ha ha. thanks for sharing. time for my walk. :)
    i have a bit o irish in me. but you probably could tell that.(Report)Reply

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  • Ken E Hall (9/6/2013 7:48:00 AM)

    Very nice to read reality as it is for most of us, glad to know beauty still stays within and when you listen you can see it..original and thought provoking...regards(Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, August 31, 2013

Poem Edited: Tuesday, September 3, 2013


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