Alone Tone


Memories - Poem by Alone Tone

rain in my head
seep out my eyes
drain from my heart,
now i do part

forgetting is dead
on flow thrives
muscled in by layers-
voiced with slayers

idled upon energy's thread
cuckoo'd from its tide
familied by a brand-
freezes hour's sand

sear'd till widespread
my marrow to fry
murdered by ghost
living now as their host


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  • Ben Gieske (10/16/2008 6:35:00 PM)

    I like the format and rhymes. You employed a lot of good imagery. The 1st,2nd, and 4th stanzas read very well, but the 3rd stanza does not match the rhythm of the other stanzas with too many syllables. I find it her to make sense of “familied by a brand- freezes hour's sand”. You have some good ideas. (Report)Reply

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  • Midnight Clarity (10/16/2008 7:59:00 AM)

    The almost syncopated rhythm of the lines perfectly captures a 'memory meltdown' where the head is filled with chatter.
    Some strong images, evocative but sad.
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  • Seema Chowdhury (10/14/2008 8:56:00 PM)

    nice memories of your. i like the selection of your words. well done. (Report)Reply

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  • Karima Astrid PKarima Astrid P (10/14/2008 8:21:00 PM)

    i like how you put your emotions in your poetry... (Report)Reply

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  • Ency BearisEncy Bearis (10/14/2008 5:16:00 PM)

    an introspective write deeply expressed..written well to a great poem...excellent
    A 10...

    Ency Bearis
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  • rohit sapra (10/14/2008 5:02:00 PM)

    I surely agree that is the effect of painful memories which haunt the existence of a human. Powerful emotions are displayed very nicely in this poem of yours. (Report)Reply

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  • R T (10/14/2008 3:51:00 PM)

    Hi Alone,
    As much as this poem is sad as much as it is so lovely and well written, I loved it much cause i felt each word by the perfect way of expressing.

    well done
    R.T
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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, October 14, 2008



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