Asif Baloch

Freshman - 650 Points (06-06-1978 / karachi)

Mingled Thoughts - Poem by Asif Baloch

Tears tho i shed
turns into rhymes
with blood thus I wrote
stories of denials

Rising falling everyday
staring into fake display
a canvas which I put on wall
turned white, colorless
reflecting pale

The sorrow tho I wore
I knead them with tears
a sack full of pain
is my earning put by fate

The yearnings thus I yearn
promissed love of my own
boat made of hopes
flooded away by denials

Comments about Mingled Thoughts by Asif Baloch

  • (12/12/2008 9:25:00 AM)

    well expressed! a true meaning of tears
    really an emotional piece of write but its one of my favourite poem as i love these type of poems.
    good job!

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  • (12/7/2008 4:56:00 AM)

    I love the pain especially, when you write about it... A true picture of anguish of an insightful mind... (Report) Reply

  • Sathyanarayana M V S (12/6/2008 11:50:00 PM)

    Your poems(broken-heart especially) exude so much of honesty mingled with beautiful imagery, pain, anguish and true love inside. No dramatics atall! ! ! I write rather dramatically........may be because I am not in the age of falling in love.........Please take a look at my small pieces MY QUESTIONS and
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  • (12/6/2008 5:24:00 PM)

    Very emotional. Your second stanza is quite effective.

    Warm regards,

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  • (12/6/2008 12:10:00 PM)

    I love your first stanza! ! ! it is greatly written! ! ! very good job.
    Rising falling everyday
    staring into fake display
    i put on a fake display for most people or they make up their own of me just because I can squat almost 400 lb dose not make me stonge.
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Poem Submitted: Friday, December 5, 2008

Poem Edited: Monday, May 3, 2010

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