Murder At Six Poem by Shogunoka Ledesma III

Murder At Six

Rating: 5.0


The day is dying
Its bright blood smeared
On the azure blanket
See its light blinding no more
The orb resting its head on the horizon
Of salty diamonds

The clouds wipe the blood
Screaming to the heavens
As the birds moan in agony
Fleeing the incoming darkness
Of the murdering night

I can see the glowing smile of the moon
Her breath chilling
As she glares enviously
While a million knowing eyes
Watched silently, shivering in fright.

The sun succumbs to its death
Drowned by the rising tide
The night howls in triumph
And covers the land with its sickly glow
And we surrender to its call
Close our eyes and wait for the sun to return

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bridgid Patrick 19 February 2006

This is very powerful...sincerely bridgid...x

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Cynthia Aluning 17 February 2006

Very rich in metaphors. A good penning, maganda! I could not thoroughly conclude that the story dealt with a murder scene, you could be touching on another introspection much deeper and let our imagination works on different perspective, perhaps characterizing a dark life, a fate gone ill, sudden frustration or illness could also be the theme of this write, no doubt about the tone...t'was sad and greatly expressed. Galing talaga ng pinoy! ... =cynthia PS: thanks for the comment u provided my poem THE FINAL PLEA, you're right in every word told. Good morning Philippines.

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Gershon Hepner 14 February 2006

Very powerful imagery. The atmosphere is almost primeval. Congratulations! gershon

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Gina Onyemaechi 14 February 2006

Rich writing, Shogunoka, and that's one clever title. Regards, Gina.

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