These are my words, I’ve never said before,
Before is when I was myself,
Myself is who I thought I knew,
Now I know that wasn’t really me,
Take of it what you will,
Will you realize for you do not know me,
But you presume still,
Still I’d like to be human just like you are,
Are the feelings you feel for me too far,
Far from your senses allow,
For I do not understand how,
How you are happy with the life you lead,
Lead yourself not into temptation,
Temptation is a world of greed.
Well thought out Ben - the usage of same word ending and beginning is novel and reads well..... concept good - - could do with a little more meat maybe as body of the piece is a little in need..... a very good read however and 10 from Fay..
Very deep poem loved this one you did great on expressing your feelings. laurel
You write how you feel and that is good, another well written piece, thanks 10 Lynda xx
I like this one but it doesn't have the rythm that it needs to flow properly and is not consistant rhyming, Continue however writing down your feelings however you wish. It's who you are. God Bless, Linda
Great work Ben, I feel it. I really do, it's pretty close how I feel it. And if you didnt write this, I wouldve. :)
Noone knows oneself than oneself. Each self has its secrets to canceal and weaknesses to congeal. Well penned poem;
On occasion I agree with Fay Slimm. This is such an occasion. Flesh out the poem as there must be plenty to tell. A very good effort though. H
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
wOw! ! ! thoughful poem! ! ! I liked it so much...10+ How you are happy with the life you lead, Lead yourself not into temptation, Temptation is a world of greed. ----> wise verses! ! !