I kneel down today, to seek for your ear
As I need you to hear
What I’m about to say.
I kneel down today, begging for mercy
I know this is early
But I need it urgently.
The world is changing,
And I’m failing
I’m losing my way.
And I’m feeling gray.
I feel as if my life is about to end
And I can’t pretend,
I don’t know where I’m going next.
I’m starting to get vexed, cause I feel hell coming my way.
I don’t want to go hell,
Cause I’ll be locked up in a cell.
So God please hear me out
As I don’t intent to shout
Please find a place in your heart
Cause I don’t want to depart from you.
Forgive me, for I have sinned.
Hi Luzia I think this is an excellent poem, the message is strong and prayer does work. Two minor adjustments are required though the title should read Oh God, Hear My Prayer and in the 15th line the wording whould be to go to Hell I always read my poems over several times before submitting them and almost always go back and make corrections in several days after letting them sit for a while. All of our poetry can be improved upon with a little work. Even Robert Frost would go back over his poetry after weeks and make changes. This is a very good poem and don't worry about sinning, we're all sinners and need improvement. At least try and stay out of jail, which means you have to make better choices in your life. Don't hang out with the wrong people and you are definitely smart enough to know who they are. Discretion and restraint are two good words for you to practice. Good luck in all your future endeavors!
great poetic prayer.. beautiful monologue.. i m sure He hears and will answer! the rendition is powerful and deep, as well as humble and humbling. we have all been through this part at some times.. i think this is what makes us humans. this is a good poem, Lucia! !
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Your poem...is the best I have read this week! You're a star!