It's one of those days
when things slow down
to a crawl
but the air of autumn
is palpably moving
and the falling of leaves
makes a noise
you often hear
inside you
on insomniac nights
when past and future stand
before you
and you feel crumbling
in your bones
and you feel peeling
in your skin
and all of you sheds
till you become one
with the autumn tree.
Nosheen Irfan © 2017
A vivid portrayal of autumn with its effects on nature and human beings.. The superb imagery and the way this write was crafted make us go with the thoughts of the brilliant Poetess. Beautifully written.
Beautiful Nosheen! I love the image of the autumn leaves falling one by one and the gentle sound echoing in the heart on sleepless nights! Finally the tree is left bare! But I don't feel any sense of deep melancholy here! The bare tree stands unshaken as a symbol of stoic endurance through autumn and winter waiting for another spring for it to burst into leaves and flowers....! A beautiful poem deserving top marks!
You found a way to express the melancholy of autumn without yourself surrendering to sadness. Your poem focuses clearly on an aspect of the general sadness of life and you express it in beautiful language because autumn, melancholy, sadness are all part of life and deserve to be acknowledged. Bless you, Nosheen: by showing us the beauty even in a sad season you make us readers look beyond mere sadness to be thankful and share the thankfulness.
....and all of you sheds till you become one with the autumn tree... Beautiful lines to end such a lovely poem. The autumn of October is filling the heart on insomniac nights till one becomes ready to shed all of the being with a surge to unify entirely with the autumn tree. A poem filled with sweetness tip to toe. Thanks great poetess for this lovely sharing. Regards. Subhas
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Noise of autumn comes like pleasant melody. Autumn trees hum with falling leaves. Feelings crumble and mind feels life's status. An amazing poem is shared here is brilliantly penned.10