Paradelle* For You Poem by Ben Gieske

Paradelle* For You



While walking in the park I heard a bell.
While walking in the park I heard a bell.
There was a bird singing in the shade.
There was a bird singing in the shade.
A bird I heard walking in the shade while
There in the park was a bell singing.

Looking at Magnolia flowers on the tree,
Looking at Magnolia flowers on the tree,
I stopped further on passing a cat near the well.
I stopped further on passing a cat near the well.
Further on a cat stopped near the Magnolia tree,
I passing looking at flowers on the well.

Such was my delight when seeing you,
Such was my delight when seeing you,
I knew a day full of joy.
I knew a day full of joy.
Full of seeing delight was my day,
When such a you, joy I knew.

When I was walking passing a well,
looking at day flowers in the shade,
Such delight full Magnolia, I heard;
Knew the joy of a bird on a tree,
The bell in the park, further on a cat.
Stopped there was I
While seeing you near singing my.

- July 13,2007

* The paradelle is a French fixed form first appearing in the 11th century. It is a poem of four six-line stanzas in which the first and second lines, as well as the third and fourth lines of the first three stanzas, must be identical. The fifth and sixth lines, which traditionally resolve these stanzas, must use all the words from the preceding lines and only those words. Similarly, the final stanza must use every word from all the preceding stanzas and only those words.

Published by Language and Culture magazine in Summmer'Fall Edition of June,2008
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COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Joseph Daly 15 July 2007

I recall coming across this form a few years back. This is excellent, the form itself must be difficult to use and not sound olde English. You manage to avoid that very well. Notice the similarity with this and Blue's lyrics. I do recall that some early French composers made lute songs of a few of these. Unfortunately is great to see writers tackling various form and learning from them. I'd concur with Jim comcerning the difficulties forms can present. This is a great piece of work, Ben. I hope that you might tackle som other forgotten forms.

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Not a member No 4 14 July 2007

Tough piece of work, word by word, line by line and with a strong product as the result is no mean feat! Great discipline and invention, and the incantatory technique helps conjure strong images and a vivid atmosphere. A real pleasure to experience.

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