A Mouse (Haiku) Poem by Ben Gieske
A Mouse (Haiku)
moon shadow
the little gray mouse
edges toward the cheese
placed 5th in the December 2007 Shiki Monthly Kukai (free format)
This is as good a 'ku as i've seen on here. What else is there in the mouse's world, but that cheese? Watch out for the- (SMACK!) ...
MOUSEY PUT YOUR CRASH HELMET ON FIRST LOL! Thanks Ben Love duncan X
It's the goal of every haiku, that of expressing a whole universe in a few short lines.I love this one.It made me feel in the shoes of the little mouse.There is no one to stop me from getting what i want (the cheese) .But is it moral, is it right to get the cheese?
In wintry night cat catch the crying mice is it tears or dew............... Good write........
Ben,5th place? -your haiku should have been in first place! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! a ten from me...
wow a lovely haiku mouse edging to cheese -10 anjali (read mine too haikus of love)
nice one..a 'koo'ing image on the moon and the cloudy spread...10
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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6/4/2023 1:03:14 PM # 1.0.0.1113
a good haiku...poet is not self -absorbed and discrete from the object, a real haiku...