A Mouse (Haiku) Poem by Ben Gieske

A Mouse (Haiku)

Rating: 3.6


moon shadow
the little gray mouse
edges toward the cheese

placed 5th in the December 2007 Shiki Monthly Kukai (free format)

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Duncan Wyllie 25 May 2008

MOUSEY PUT YOUR CRASH HELMET ON FIRST LOL! Thanks Ben Love duncan X

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Chris Mendros 25 May 2008

This is as good a 'ku as i've seen on here. What else is there in the mouse's world, but that cheese? Watch out for the- (SMACK!) ...

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Estrella Baldemosa 29 June 2008

a good haiku...poet is not self -absorbed and discrete from the object, a real haiku...

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Alison Cassidy 25 December 2007

A delicate poem in exquisite taste... love, Allie xxxx

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Rachel Flint 28 December 2007

ALL THE TIME TRYING TO AVOID THE CAT... CUTE POEM!

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Ramesh Rai 17 October 2014

This reflects the natural phenomenon of life. Nice.

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Dr Hitesh Sheth 14 March 2009

In wintry night cat catch the crying mice is it tears or dew............... Good write........

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Ben,5th place? -your haiku should have been in first place! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! a ten from me...

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Anjali Sinha 13 January 2009

wow a lovely haiku mouse edging to cheese -10 anjali (read mine too haikus of love)

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Kesav Easwaran 30 October 2008

nice one..a 'koo'ing image on the moon and the cloudy spread...10

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