Preetam Shetty

Race With Time

I see the glow of a candle fade,
So tender and sublime,
I know the quest has begun,
My race with time.

The chill is coming near,
Every passing second,
Inner strength is diminishing,
No hopes to amend.

Groans of misery and dismay,
Have started filling the air,
All I can feel around,
Is a wave of despair.

Drugs are alms to my life,
Machines control my oxygen,
My trunk is too atrophied,
Waiting to see the dungeon.

I smile with the memories of past,
When the sun shined in the rain,
Because now I only see solitude,
Painful than any pain.




[This composition is dedicated to all cancer patients across the globe....especially those who are left alone by thier loved ones]

Poem Submitted: Friday, June 25, 2010

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  • Marina Gasbey (7/20/2010 6:48:00 AM)

    I really respect your love for humanity. There are so many bad people out there, but there are so many good people who make up for the bad, even with their little bit of love. But I suppose the bad people aren't bad, they just do some bad things.. I feel that everyone has the ability to do good in this world. Even if it's just a small gesture.
    Thankyou for your powerful words.... Marina Gasbey....

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  • Anita Trivedi (7/1/2010 5:03:00 AM)

    Hey Preetam this poem is really very good......... Soo wel written....... God bless

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  • Guy Baldwin (6/30/2010 10:57:00 AM)

    WELL WRITTEN PREETAM, WE ALL MUST HAVE HAD OUR LIVES TOUCHED BY THIS DREADFUL MODERN CURSE.RAISING AWARENESS CAN ONLY BE A POSITVE THING. GUY

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  • Guy Baldwin (6/30/2010 10:54:00 AM)

    VERY EVOCOTIVE, WE MUST ALL OF HAD OUR LIVES TOUCHED IN SOME WAY BY CANCER, I LOST A SOULMATE VERY RECENTLY, AND IF GOOD PIECES OF WRITING LIKE THIS RAISES AWARENESS OF THIS MODERN DAY CURSE, THEN ALL THE BETTER. WELL DONE, MY FRIEND PREETAM

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  • Guy Baldwin (6/30/2010 10:53:00 AM)

    VERY EVOCOTIVE, WE MUST ALL OF HAD OUR LIVES TOUCHED IN SOME WAY BY CANCER, I LOST A SOULMATE VERY RECENTLY, AND IF GOOD PIECES OF WRITING LIKE THIS RAISES AWARENESS OF THIS MODERN DAY CURSE, THEN ALL THE BETTER. WELL DONE, MY FRIEND PREETAM

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  • Guy Baldwin (6/30/2010 10:51:00 AM)

    VERY EVOCOTIVE, WE MUST ALL OF HAD OUR LIVES TOUCHED IN SOME WAY BY CANCER, I LOST A SOULMATE VERY RECENTLY, AND IF GOOD PIECES OF WRITING LIKE THIS RAISES AWARENESS OF THIS MODERN DAY CURSE, THEN ALL THE BETTER. WELL DONE, MY FRIEND PREETAM

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  • Paul James (6/30/2010 4:28:00 AM)

    A powerful piece.
    It asks us to respect and remember all those who suffer without over stating the point.
    You could go on and on about suffering but the power is in the point being made simply and effectively.

    Keeping faith in human nature is something that we seem to be lacking, but this poem restores this paucity of faith.

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  • Chaitanya Dorwat (6/28/2010 10:42:00 PM)

    I could feel the fear,
    agonies in your write,
    every thing making u sear,
    every bit of the world u have in ur sight.

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  • Dickson MsetiDickson Mseti (6/28/2010 6:34:00 AM)

    this is what i call rich. figures of speech and wonderful expression. i like this one. Thanks for sharing.

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  • Mallory Piña Villa (6/26/2010 1:18:00 PM)

    Harch word but still soft and meaningful a sweet lullaby of words tender and sweet to take with you till the end, my thanks to you, a wonderful poet // mallory...

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  • Kudakwashe Roak Mutama (6/26/2010 7:29:00 AM)

    'I see the glow of a candle fade,
    So tender and sublime,
    I know the quest has begun,
    My race with time.'

    from this stanza you can not really tell that it was going to talk about cancer patients.... coz this stanza is more universal in the sense that everyone the day they are born the race with time begins but looking at it with a different eye it may sound like the words of a person who is growing up fast yet they have not achieve what they want to achieve and they begin to wonder if they are going to beat time coz the clock will be ticking.....

    but i thank you so much for dedicating this piece to cancer patients and i respect you for sharing such a great poem.... we also pray for them and remember them.

    keep up the sense of humanity that you have and we are going to be here standing for those who have such values....

    thank you once again...

    chao

    kuda

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  • Naz Nen (6/26/2010 3:54:00 AM)

    wow, sad
    its good keep goin

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  • Dr Tony BrahminDr Tony Brahmin (6/26/2010 1:32:00 AM)

    Groans of misery and dismay,
    Have started filling the air,
    All I can feel around,
    Is a wave of despair. in these lines u bring in real despair of those who suffer.

    i praise your magnanimity to dedicate a poem to people who suffer from cancer.
    it is a great work especially when u think of the sufferings of others.

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  • Pranab K ChakrabortyPranab K Chakraborty (6/26/2010 1:23:00 AM)

    Your dedicated confession should be put in the beginning. I vote you by heart more...more than thousands. A good writing with a mild blow of departing. Well Preetam, you have touched the poetry by heart. Run long and write more.....more........

    Thank you very much,
    10+++++
    pranab

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  • James Jordan (6/25/2010 1:14:00 PM)

    I love the innocence in this poem... well delivered :)

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  • The Lost.. (6/25/2010 1:11:00 PM)

    this is really too hard
    wonderful indeed
    hoe u and all cancer patients will be better and fine soon...
    thanks for sharing :)

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  • Louie -Love & Peace- Levy (6/25/2010 12:10:00 PM)

    Mr Shetty, request, I oblige
    I've long since 'Mused' to express with rhyme. Serious saddened thoughts do not originate to be a lyric for song and dance. Metaphor is to word for a less depth felt emotion, whereas, your articulate composition need define and dedicate where that of simplicity be read with complete understanding.
    Your Note; conveys that which it seeks to not impress, but reveal all 'Empathy' -
    that Is spontaneous and written from within.

    ...louie
    levy

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  • Gan Chennai (6/25/2010 10:46:00 AM)

    A Great Tribute to all Cancer Patients. Days are not far from this Disease being shown the Door.

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  • Denise Bekker ~* The Sound *~ (6/25/2010 10:03:00 AM)

    Awesome my friend, They say time waits for no man.. What a dedication to cancer patients. Blessings upon you, Preetam.; D

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  • Gita AshokGita Ashok (6/25/2010 7:34:00 AM)

    Very nice composition. I feel it could be dedicated to the whole of mankind - not necessarily to cancer patients alone as pain need not always be physical. Each one of us is like a diminishing candle...the countdown has already begun as we are getting ready to reach our final destination. Yes, a painless and peaceful end would always be welcome...heralding a new beginning after a beautiful end.

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