God, guide me through the Valley of the Shadows of Death,
For I know no love, nor what is best.
I feel a sharp pain deep inside my chest,
Is it my love about to fold,
Or is it just my heart growing cold.
I keep falling into the darkness.
I can't stop falling I have no harness.
My world is dead and black.
I'm surrounded by dark shadows back to back.
I wish they would stop and attack,
And finish my life.
Before my veins feel the blade of this knife.
God, guide me through the Valley of the Shadows of Death,
For I know no love, nor what is best.
Fine piece, lots of true emotion..heart felt write.. All the best Jon
Very good, i love your expression of emotion. it realy painted a scene, well done
This is certainly a very good poem....it sounded me like a Vedic prayer...wonderful indeed....10
The fact that you are asking God for help, shows that you still believe there is hope. Trust in that help.
This has the structure and the rhymes are better. Overall, a good effort. I recommend it. GW62
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
A sincere poem to god, good one