Dulakshi Wakista


Sun Burnt Me..... - Poem by Dulakshi Wakista

I walked to the door step
It was a sunny day
Uncle Johnny called me outside
I ran and passed the pine tree
Sun shimmered
Uncle Johnny waited for me...
Oh no! bloody tyrant sun rays
Touched my hand and face
I couldn't face up to it
My face turned red
Oh gosh! Sun burnt me....
My heart drowned, full of
Sadness and unshed tears....
I was excited!
I couldn't bear my wounds’ pain
O thou saddest day!
I wonder why the Sun
Burned me.....
Gloomed and doomed my life
Sun scorched me
Left its deadly marks on me
Aimed its rays to destroy me
Is this my life fate?


Comments about Sun Burnt Me..... by Dulakshi Wakista

  • Guzin Balpetek (9/18/2015 6:51:00 AM)


    interesting poem, but I like it (Report) Reply

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  • Dr.tony Brahmin (7/29/2010 2:08:00 PM)


    Oh no! bloody tyrant sun rays
    Touched my hand and face
    I couldn't face up to it
    My face turned red
    Oh gosh! Sun burnt me....

    from trivial to reality...is it ur aim in describing the sun burn?
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  • (6/5/2010 8:49:00 AM)


    O thou saddest day!
    I wonder why the Sun
    Burned me.....
    Gloomed and doomed my life
    Sun scorched me
    Left its deadly marks on me
    Aimed its rays to destroy me
    Is this my life fate?

    its really a well written poem with innovative way of expression.. the best is your idea and expression and the way you wrote is very much poetic and soul feeling..lovely poem...10/10 ++++++++
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  • (4/1/2010 10:03:00 PM)


    Tragically beautiful.........How the story goes, in a rythmical pattern, going along of how the burnt thee.! 10 awesomeness (Report) Reply

  • Gita Ashok (4/1/2010 9:12:00 AM)


    Hi Dulakshi:
    Enjoyed reading this poem thoroughly. A simple theme has been handled so well by you.
    Amazing! Keep on writing.
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  • (3/30/2010 1:23:00 PM)


    BEAUTIFUL POEM LIFE IS SUM TIMES PAINFUL WELL WRITTEN MY FRIEND (Report) Reply

  • (3/8/2010 12:21:00 PM)


    Hi Dulakshi

    Beautiful poem... unique in its sense....
    Sun would kiss you and bless you

    I enjoyed

    Thank you
    10+
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  • Howard 'the motivational poet' Simon (3/7/2010 8:41:00 AM)


    You have used a common situation to write a unique poem. Well done my freind. (Report) Reply

  • Seema Gupta (3/5/2010 1:08:00 AM)


    Left its deadly marks on me
    Aimed its rays to destroy me
    Is this my life fate?

    ' really it made me go in deep thought..... yes every one wanna knw fate of life....words reflects a deep pain'

    regards
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  • (3/2/2010 11:11:00 PM)


    just like the sun, you shine because of your passion in poetry. See how powerful it can be when you, who is passionate enough to make such lovely poems frees your emotions? nice one. God bless! (Report) Reply

  • (2/27/2010 7:09:00 AM)


    hey dulakshi.....
    i liked the way u presented the sun......
    v.gud
    keep it up
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  • (2/26/2010 10:30:00 AM)


    very well written. you've used metaphors which i like in the poems. to see the sun as fire....well done. keep it up (Report) Reply

  • (2/26/2010 8:46:00 AM)


    Like your poem...'sun Burnt Me' the metaphor of being burnt by the sun can be scorching. good write a 10 (Report) Reply

  • Michelle Freeman (2/26/2010 8:15:00 AM)


    i liked it but i think you were probably writing about something else other than the sun. hopefully the scars will heal with time (well at least some of them) (Report) Reply

  • (2/24/2010 8:58:00 AM)


    another awesome write! ! (Report) Reply

  • (2/24/2010 3:37:00 AM)


    The 'Sun' is blameless, life would not exist on Earth without it.
    Such as 'fire' warns to not touch, so your foolishness to expose your self unprotected to it is worded to blame its beneficiial power.
    You offer no profile as to age or self interests, etc. Your Immaturity does reflect and having given some thought and time, you will will have more self insight of the world and life in general
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  • (2/24/2010 1:35:00 AM)


    good poem, well done
    i like it
    (Report) Reply

  • (2/23/2010 11:11:00 PM)


    Nice poem with good talent of you Dulakshi, but you very fateful look, 'it is my life fate? ' (Report) Reply

  • (2/23/2010 3:09:00 AM)


    wowwwwwwwww
    a lovely poem
    good imagery
    and wonderful metaphors
    on the whole-an enjoyable write
    -10 anjali
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  • (2/23/2010 3:09:00 AM)


    wowwwwwwwww
    a lovely poem
    good imagery
    and wonderful metaphors
    on the whole-an enjoyable write
    -10 anjali
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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, February 10, 2010

Poem Edited: Wednesday, August 10, 2011


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