Akhtar Jawad

Gold Star - 143,632 Points (8-2-1945 / Gorakhpur)

The Candle - Poem by Akhtar Jawad

Burning and melting,
Lightning but no thunder,
Tears dropping drown like icicles,
Freezing but not cool,
Having lost,
Smoothness of her body,
She is hot,
The hot icicles have changed her shape,
Still graceful,
Looking more beautiful,
Even more sexy,
She is a source of light,
Light that cracked,
The dark lonely night,
In a silent night she is silent but bright,
Withstanding with the naughty blows,
Of sea blows that touch her and runaway,
See her smile on the naught of the breeze,
She never protests,
Just dances with the touches,
The virgin is waiting for someone,
Who not merely touches her flame,
The bold handsome,
Who can kiss her flame,
And courage to be burnt,
In a true love,
That will burn someone,
And convert in ashes,
Lo he came and kissed the flame,
Her flame dances last time,
Nothing is remained,
Except the fumes,
Death of a night is birth of a day,
It’s not only moon and the stars,
A candle too was burnt in a night,
A dark lonely night for love only love,
Leaving behind ashes and fumes,
With tears of dew,
With the parting kisses of night white flowers,
She goes by a flight of the Milky Way,
And the Milky Way takes off on skies,
The morning star,
The only one,
With the wet eyes, waves his hands,
Sees off the candle,
And leaves for the home,
The smiling dawn takes over the charge,
With an earth enlighten,
Here goes a night with the tales of the moon!
The forgotten candle I am sorry for you,
And your lover too!

Topic(s) of this poem: forgotten love


Comments about The Candle by Akhtar Jawad

  • Rose Marie Juan-austin (5/29/2018 4:54:00 PM)


    Here to revisit this wonderful poem..
    Always enraptured by the beauty of words and thoughts embedded in this write.
    '' Death of a night is birth of a day.'' Wonderful line from a great poem.
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  • Lungelo S Mbuyazi (5/29/2018 8:50:00 AM)


    Great worked in this sad love, emotional artwork....10+ (Report) Reply

  • Mahtab Bangalee (5/29/2018 2:16:00 AM)


    excellent she is-

    She is hot,
    The hot icicles have changed her shape,
    Still graceful,
    Looking more beautiful,
    Even more sexy,
    She is a source of light,
    Light that cracked,
    The dark lonely night,
    In a silent night she is silent but bright,

    great 10+++
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  • Dr Dillip K Swain (5/17/2018 4:08:00 AM)


    Death of a night is birth of a day,
    It’s not only moon and the stars,
    A candle too was burnt in a night,
    A dark lonely night for love only love,
    Leaving behind ashes and fumes
    -Fascinating poetic expression! It's my great pleasure revisiting this fabulous piece of poetry!
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  • Deep Paul (5/16/2018 8:09:00 AM)


    Loved reading this wonderful poem. Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • Britte Ninad (5/16/2018 3:22:00 AM)


    excel of beauty-

    In a true love,
    That will burn someone,
    And convert in ashes,
    Lo he came and kissed the flame,
    Her flame dances last time,
    Nothing is remained,
    Except the fumes,
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  • (4/22/2018 8:25:00 PM)


    So beautiful! thank you for sharing this. (Report) Reply

  • Jez Brul (4/20/2018 11:36:00 PM)


    This is such a symbolic poem....a candle that lights a dark room, a dark path, and a dark soul.
    A candle that gives light without asking in return...that's the essence of true love.

    A full mark 10 and to my poem list..
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  • (4/9/2018 1:37:00 PM)


    enjoyed reading your poem Akhtar, thank you Alan (Report) Reply

  • (4/7/2018 1:38:00 AM)


    A very beautiful poem with sharp imagery. I think I must include this in my list of favourites, Akhtar (Report) Reply

  • Rose Marie Juan-austin (3/9/2018 7:36:00 PM)


    A very imaginative beautifully crafted write. The burning of the candle is likened to the passion and desire of a lover until nothing remained only the ashes and fumes.There are so many perspectives that can be drawn with this thought provoking poem. A treasure worth of being read multiple times.10 (Report) Reply

  • Rini Shibu (2/17/2018 6:15:00 AM)


    In silent night she is silent and bright..along with moon and star she too spread light at night
    Loved reading this poem..amazing
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  • Houda Boukassoula (1/22/2018 4:57:00 AM)


    Awonderful picturesque poem that lit a candle somewhere inside me.Thanks for sharing it (Report) Reply

  • Dr Dillip K Swain (1/20/2018 12:32:00 AM)


    You have wonderfully presented a burning candle here in this fabulous poem! ……..Burning and melting, Lightning but no thunder, Tears dropping drown like icicles, Freezing but not cool……A poem of great substance! Thanks for sharing...10 (Report) Reply

  • Christina Simmons (11/24/2017 6:40:00 AM)


    Such a great imagination, you possess. This poem is a beautiful read - it has left me breathless. Well done, dear poet. (Report) Reply

  • (11/2/2017 8:43:00 AM)


    very expressive and a meaningful write, thank you for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • (4/30/2017 5:04:00 AM)


    A beautiful forgotten story................................................ (Report) Reply

  • The Poet Poet (4/11/2017 12:52:00 AM)


    Exquisite love poetry
    if only you had honoured those
    who to your poems bring victory
    You sought me
    I came over
    you read one or two
    then slept over

    you don't know me
    nor the candle will show
    yes through your poetry
    and
    my comments
    my name shall also glow

    do some sympathy show
    and
    light the other's candles
    so that they may also glow

    All poets here must know....
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  • Vaidyanathan Ram Iyer (3/4/2017 12:18:00 AM)


    Directed the thoughts in different observation,
    Nice thought sir.10p
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  • Siddartha Montik (12/24/2016 3:43:00 AM)

    Simple truth!
    Lovely glorification of the Graceful & sacrificial candle. that probably gave light for centuries....! Too good sir, thank youfor sharing.10++++! (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, March 9, 2015



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