Akhtar Jawad

Gold Star - 103,741 Points (8-2-1945 / Gorakhpur)

The Candle - Poem by Akhtar Jawad

Burning and melting,
Lightning but no thunder,
Tears dropping drown like icicles,
Freezing but not cool,
Having lost,
Smoothness of her body,
She is hot,
The hot icicles have changed her shape,
Still graceful,
Looking more beautiful,
Even more sexy,
She is a source of light,
Light that cracked,
The dark lonely night,
In a silent night she is silent but bright,
Withstanding with the naughty blows,
Of sea blows that touch her and runaway,
See her smile on the naught of the breeze,
She never protests,
Just dances with the touches,
The virgin is waiting for someone,
Who not merely touches her flame,
The bold handsome,
Who can kiss her flame,
And courage to be burnt,
In a true love,
That will burn someone,
And convert in ashes,
Lo he came and kissed the flame,
Her flame dances last time,
Nothing is remained,
Except the fumes,
Death of a night is birth of a day,
It’s not only moon and the stars,
A candle too was burnt in a night,
A dark lonely night for love only love,
Leaving behind ashes and fumes,
With tears of dew,
With the parting kisses of night white flowers,
She goes by a flight of the Milky Way,
And the Milky Way takes off on skies,
The morning star,
The only one,
With the wet eyes, waves his hands,
Sees off the candle,
And leaves for the home,
The smiling dawn takes over the charge,
With an earth enlighten,
Here goes a night with the tales of the moon!
The forgotten candle I am sorry for you,
And your lover too!

Topic(s) of this poem: forgotten love

Comments about The Candle by Akhtar Jawad

  • (4/30/2017 5:04:00 AM)

    A beautiful forgotten story................................................ (Report) Reply

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  • The Poet Poet (4/11/2017 12:52:00 AM)

    Exquisite love poetry
    if only you had honoured those
    who to your poems bring victory
    You sought me
    I came over
    you read one or two
    then slept over

    you don't know me
    nor the candle will show
    yes through your poetry
    my comments
    my name shall also glow

    do some sympathy show
    light the other's candles
    so that they may also glow

    All poets here must know....
    (Report) Reply

  • Vaidyanathan Ram Iyer (3/4/2017 12:18:00 AM)

    Directed the thoughts in different observation,
    Nice thought sir.10p
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  • Siddartha Montik (12/24/2016 3:43:00 AM)

    Simple truth!
    Lovely glorification of the Graceful & sacrificial candle. that probably gave light for centuries....! Too good sir, thank youfor sharing.10++++! (Report) Reply

  • Soulful Heart (5/29/2016 1:19:00 AM)

    beautiful as the candle itself.......nothing in this world can beautiful unless it purges itself in the fire of strife n pain......nicely expressed in a romantic tone... (Report) Reply

  • Pamela Sinicrope (5/10/2016 2:57:00 PM)

    Death of a night is birth of a day, ... There's so much contained within one burning candle in one liquifying night. Creatively expressed and shared. So much perspective on the melting wax, the candle, the flame, the night, types of loves, lovers, women. Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • Uzefa Rashida M.a (2/13/2016 5:34:00 AM)

    Beautiful candle light night poem telling us the mysteries a candle holds just like beautiful women are mysterious. Well said lines. (Report) Reply

  • The Poet Poet (11/29/2015 3:28:00 PM)

    I had commented where has it gone (Report) Reply

  • The Poet Poet (11/29/2015 3:26:00 PM)

    Your poems are extraordinary.. I came from the lands of the Aussies ''DOWN UNDER; ; just to read your poetry Glad you will also read me .You are a graded poet (Report) Reply

  • Bharati Nayak (8/30/2015 8:53:00 PM)

    A burning candle can never be more beautiful as in this poem.A marvelous write! ! (Report) Reply

  • Yasmin Khan (8/21/2015 12:41:00 AM)

    Very romantic poem, the burning of a candle is seen with a poet's eye! (Report) Reply

  • (7/19/2015 5:05:00 AM)

    The sea of a candle melts into a wonderful poem magic to read indeed...regards (Report) Reply

  • (6/9/2015 2:00:00 AM)

    This was so beautifully written, it’s amazing the effect. (Report) Reply

  • Terry Craddock (6/3/2015 5:48:00 PM)

    'The Candle' is a wonderful poem with unique intriguing twists and I loved and adored this poem Akhtar, therefore because the motif of a candle is an image I also have been drawn to several times, because the theme juxtapositions thrilled me with smiles, I am going to save this poem to MyPoemList so that I can reread this poem from time to time when the mood for mystic weaves the desire for mysteries into my mind.10+ my friend :) (Report) Reply

  • (3/29/2015 7:15:00 AM)

    A lovely poem......................10 (Report) Reply

  • (3/23/2015 8:13:00 AM)

    Excellent.....How beautifully you have portrayed love..just, lovely. (Report) Reply

  • Kelly Kurt (3/22/2015 10:25:00 PM)

    Wonderful. I am heartened by the way that many things are the same, no matter age, religion or country. Poetry and love are among those universalities. (Report) Reply

  • Bri Edwards (3/22/2015 11:49:00 AM)

    is there imagery here? i suppose. i'm no expert or fan of imagery. much of it is beyond me. i read many of the comments. they are quite varying, but i think unanimously favorable. let me say that, without being 'great english', i think it is a fine poem, well worth reading. some nice visions were placed in my head by it.

    i think these are my favorite lines:

    Having lost,
    Smoothness of her body,
    She is hot,
    The hot icicles have changed her shape,
    Still graceful,
    Looking more beautiful,
    Even more sexy, ....................how could i NOT be 'turned on by a poem about a sexy candle! ! ! ! ?

    bri :)
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  • Hazel Durham (3/14/2015 8:38:00 AM)

    Intense, deep flowing with a grace as beautiful as your forgotten love that stirs exotic memories of a special lady that put a tantalizing spell on you as the flame of the candle and the moon and the stars leave a trail of tears!
    Stunning write!
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  • (3/11/2015 2:40:00 PM)

    Beautiful.... wonderful Poem....! ! ! 10 on 10.. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, March 9, 2015

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