Lily Law

Rookie - 11 Points (9 April 1989 / Sarawak, Malaysia)

The Mask - Poem by Lily Law

I felt my face weighed
by a filigree white mask
with a embroidered smile
that show
no sorrow
no anger
no hatred
no envy
no resentment
no fear
but just a pure happiness
I could feel
as time ticked away
the mask became as one with the soul
as breath stolen silently
the mask began to poison the mind
as light faded slowly
the mask started to conquer the heart
and I knew
at the end of the period
no trace could be found
nothing was left behind
but only the white mask
continue to roam this realm
spreading its supremacy

Comments about The Mask by Lily Law

  • (3/27/2009 12:02:00 PM)

    When mask of anger, greed, enmity is removed.........what remain is pure joy of self.........Good Write................10+++...... (Report) Reply

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  • (3/27/2009 2:13:00 AM)

    nice write...explains how an over assuming mind forgets own real self...10 (Report) Reply

  • Is It Poetry James Mclain (3/26/2009 3:44:00 PM)

    Masks face combine blemishes lines flaws
    beauty passion grace fashions unfolding
    as you described a test in the end.....of you...thank you
    for this wonderful poem..iip
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  • Palas Kumar Ray (2/25/2009 10:50:00 PM)

    What you fear is not baseless Lily. We become what we pretend to be.We become the mask at the end and this is surprisingly true.Deep thought expressed here.Keep it up.
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  • (10/30/2008 4:18:00 AM)

    realy luvd it...reminds so much in ourselves (Report) Reply

  • (9/26/2008 7:12:00 AM)

    Dear Lily, though you are a very young poet, and a 10 would be too much for you, I give it to you for the many beauties of the poem.It's the play of the life (albeit you have not enough experiences) . Go on with new fresh ideas. Work for high verses!
    Joseph Josephides
    Member of the International Society of Poets (ISP) Intern.Library of Poetry awarded
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  • (9/24/2008 9:23:00 PM)

    I really like this, its definetly symbolic but at the same time easy to understand and connect to. (Report) Reply

  • Sarwar Chowdhury (7/6/2008 8:54:00 AM)

    This is a nice symbolic poem. Finely composed. (Report) Reply

  • Sulaiman Mohd Yusof (4/20/2008 11:26:00 PM)

    you've open the mask of writing greatly...........well done (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, April 12, 2008

Poem Edited: Thursday, October 2, 2008

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