Dan Jordan

The Misty Mountain

The Misty Mountain
Of the southern peaks
Appears most eerie and
Mysterious compared
To its neighbouring peaks
Towards the north.

For when the evening dust
Begins to appear, no creature
Or soul dare not linger about the mountain,
As the solemn and the dark mist begins to
Hang over the mountain's summit.

The spirits of dead climbers,
Who have fallen to their death
Come forth from the darkening
Mist.

A creature dare not make
A sound, for they
Will be Engulfed into the
Solemn mist, and be morphed into
A dead spirit themselves.

Lightening may sometimes strike
Upon the dead spirits
Causing them to scream and wail
With rage, as the mountain begins to
Form dark and evil shadows among
Its peaks.


The dead spirits of the mountain are the creators
Of vengeance and evil, as the solemn and dark
Mist begins to hang over the
Misty Mountain.

Poem Submitted: Thursday, December 11, 2008
Poem Edited: Sunday, December 21, 2008

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  • Truthful Light Treeclimber (12/28/2008 12:01:00 AM)

    very intense and interesting look at dusk, i personally love the feel of the shadows that descend upon the word as the sun melts below the horizon its the time when all life on earth turns black and the stars where life originated shines brighter than our life on earth, cheers to twilight

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  • Emily OldhamEmily Oldham (12/21/2008 9:43:00 AM)

    Some lovely imagery.............

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  • Bob Blackwell (12/21/2008 9:09:00 AM)

    I live upon a misty mountain, I hope they do not find me. Magic writing

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  • Ivor Hogg (12/20/2008 2:28:00 PM)

    Imaginative tale again in poetic prose

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  • C. P. SharmaC. P. Sharma (12/20/2008 7:03:00 AM)

    A nicely penned poem from mountaineering experience. It is an expression of sincere feelings. Loved reading it. Keep it up.
    CP

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  • Scott Austin (12/18/2008 2:54:00 AM)

    A very nice write you have pieced together here, thank you for sharing it with us.

    Scott

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  • Ron Flowers (12/17/2008 5:28:00 PM)

    Dan, I like this one.

    Regards
    Ron

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  • Amy (12/17/2008 12:04:00 PM)

    AN inspiring poem

    it was brilliant

    great work

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  • Ency BearisEncy Bearis (12/16/2008 3:53:00 AM)

    a very nice descriptive write..lovely..

    Ency Bearis

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  • Kevin Eaglesfield (12/16/2008 2:54:00 AM)

    Spooky.Nice read.Thanks

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  • Jerry Hughes (12/15/2008 4:09:00 PM)

    Living on a mountain I relate to these words very well.

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  • Chris Bradshaw (12/15/2008 3:32:00 PM)

    Good use of imagery. Vivid style.

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  • Colin Jeffery (12/15/2008 8:50:00 AM)

    A very good poem much enjoyed

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  • Jen Shearer (12/14/2008 9:20:00 PM)

    Wonderfully written! you are a very creative writer

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  • Lazarus Knix (12/14/2008 3:37:00 PM)

    Out of all of your poems, this one was my favorite. Such imagery, although the third verse is a tad shaky, it is great that you are this adept at such a young age. You are indeed a poet on the road to greatness.

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  • Sandra Fowler (12/14/2008 11:15:00 AM)

    A dark mood well expressed. Beware of the misty mountains, indeed.
    And praise for your rich imagination.

    Kind regards,

    Sandra

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  • Suzan Gumush (12/14/2008 4:52:00 AM)

    I see you becoming an iconic poet of your generation. Another one of your excellent writes. Keep it up. Excellent verse. Best wishes Suzan Gumush

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  • *Trusting You* (12/13/2008 4:24:00 PM)

    I really like the part about the lightening striking the souls very cool. this is nicely written. I enjoyed it a lot. good job.
    Becca

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  • Amy (12/13/2008 4:06:00 PM)

    i liked it, nice poem

    good work

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  • Marilyn LottMarilyn Lott (12/13/2008 3:50:00 PM)

    Delicious combination of the outdoors and mystery. Great poem! A '10! '

    Best Wishes,
    Marilyn

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