This Chaotic World Poem by mikayla carpenter

This Chaotic World

Rating: 5.0


So here I am,
and here you are.
We're stuck in this chaotic world together.

You pierce my lungs,
my whole body goes numb.
You watch as I fade away to nothing.

You said you'd love me forever,
but there you go.
Leaving me to wonder what I've done.

I said you'd never want another,
but here I am wrong.
Wondering what they have that I don't.

So here I am,
and here you are.
We'll die in this chaotic world together.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Kristina B; Williams 18 June 2009

YOURS CONTAINS CHOAS, AND MINE CONTAINS EVERY TYPE OF DRAMA YOU CAN IMAGINE, A WRITER 4M MY TRUE HEART..LOVELY..GAVE YOU N IT A 10, MY NEW FRIEND

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Anju Addanki 19 June 2009

hi That was a good one and yes felt a dit depressed but that i think should be a compliment. As the feelings came up automatically while reading the poem. this is best of all u r other poems.

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Julius Luke Victorio 18 June 2009

I feel like I wanna cry... It just reminds me sooo much of my ex-girlfriend: ( Seriously: '( Great poem though: D LOL 10+ for making me cry! XD

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DaNa XxX 18 June 2009

what a great piece...! ! ! nicely writtinen...good job..and keep it up^^^ yours.. DaNa... ^_^

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Saadat Tahir 18 June 2009

its deperssing dark dour and forboding....melancholy...devoid of hope...written in desperation and a receding sane state....dont mind all these words....the poetry is great...its the load it carries that is immense burden for a little girl...for thats how i see you....you have depicted a state verywell indeed more in a msg happiness to you i wish and cheers

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Shekhar Joshi 18 June 2009

nicely written.........chaotic world really......... good work ;)

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