Thy Lilium Poem by Troy Clark

I agree with Audrey...you have loads of potential. Great deep meaning in this write (right) ! ! AIAB

Jesus Christ... looks like someone needs to get laid. Sheesh. Look... you're a new writer and while your work isn't as impressive as what some people require, don't let it bother you. You have potential. Don't let pissy solipsists like Fred discourage you. Keep writing.

very well written...Keep up the good work,

I don't do this very often, but since you asked,1. I'm not much into religious stuff, unless it has some deeper intent.2. You don't 'right', you WRITE. You better pay better attention to your English teacher. Some of your juxtaposed terms; don't relate to each other. In James Joyce's 'Ulysses: ' his stream of consiousness makes more sense than your stuff. And Alan Ginsberg's 'Howl' is exciting, at least in part because the words complement ech other. And both of them went school and it shows. Learn something about the world, ; and that includes school. You can't write good poetry without knowing something, otherwise it's just blabber, garbage. In other words, get experience, and school is part of that experience..

this is a beautiful piece... you're a great poet. you have been blessed...so dont ever stop writing. i look forward to reading more of your poems.

So nice ink! I enjoyed this poem. Thanks a lot poet Troy Clark. Be well always.

wow that is a wonderful poem i wanna read all them now! ! ! ! ttyl

The previous commenter is correct. You are young to write this and you have talent to make your poetry bloom. GW62

nice poem..... you are young and have the potential....keep up the good work ency bearis

Troy, since you asked me to read this, I will say, number one, I do not like especially to be asked to read ones work.... But I did read it, and number two, just a personal thing I do not especially like Relgion poetry, good or bad, or unless it has a definate reason as for its intent, example dealing with death, ect..... But you have alot of potential, just watch your grammer, very carefully, I use the dicionary all the time and still make mistakes..... You will do fine with a little more reaching from within the soul.........Bonnie