Treading Water Poem by Tia Maria

Treading Water

Rating: 5.0


Swimming in this state of confusion
In undercurrents she may lose him
Love has only been unkind
In the backwash of her mind

Feelings washing in and out
Drowning in a pool of doubt
Seems there is no way to filter
Past hurts that still haunt her

Treading water hard she tries
To believe there are no lies
Drifting to a place unarmed
In this sea of love becalmed

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Ian Bowen 14 June 2009

Tia, enjoyed your water theme. Well written.10/10 Ian

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Andrew mark Wilkinson 14 June 2009

Life is like that sometimes Tia, but you'll feel the firm shore beneath your feet again :) I'm sure 10 Andy

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Tia Maria 14 June 2009

LoL - No need for apology deerest :) You always brighten up ph with your witty commentary... We need that :)

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tom mc quade 15 June 2009

does love ever regain its fresh experience inside the history of the heart..its hard to love for the sake of love on its own merit..and not be subdued by loves old stings..still we try..we try...lovely poem tia..the problem of love nicely elucidated..

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Ashraful Musaddeq 14 June 2009

Love this beautiful poem with 10+

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Fay Slimm 14 June 2009

How honest this reads Tia - -and we have all been there sometimes - - treading water is a way of slowing down the inevitable outcome of things - both good and not so good.... you write this so well.....10/10 from Fay.xx

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Marieta Maglas 14 June 2009

good stanzaic frame to gear up the theme..well written..10++

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T McH 14 June 2009

Your title is perfect, as is your piece. I wish you luck if this be autobiographical. Treading water as you so aptly put is is - simply horrible. But I would add, if treading, why not run to someone more deserving? You have encapsulated feelings to which many will relate. t x

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