Slit me like a sack full of grain
Spill me like sweet water
Strike me with that one last match
Burn me down to the embers
Churn me until I’m soft like butter
The oil must separate
Then wrap me in the pleasured languor of your gaze
Until they come
The unstoppable love waves
Until it comes
That smile on my face
© 2009 Sonya Florentino
a novel experience to read such expressions; slit me.....and that too in a love poem...sonya, overall impact is as desired....a lovely, cute poem, dear...
'Strike me with that one last match Burn me down to the embers'... best lines...burning passion there...10
Fiery, frenzied, seductive, sensual and oh, so passionate! A steamy triumph of a poem! S ;)
What a passionate plea for love. It really is an experience of the senses-10
Sensual, powerful and thoughts provoking! beautiful indeed! :) hugs & kisses, Smiley
The words that go with the sound, and the different images employed makes the poem a passionate one. It is elegant.
How you command the reader's immediate attention with this brilliant poem! Strike me, spill me, burn me, churn me, wrap me', all to a sensitive and sweet finale. What a clever turn you made with this one. 10 love Karin
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
The words in here are so concrete and earthen; 'slit me like a sack full of grain' 'burn me down to the embers'. You can hear and feel and almost touch the lines.