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# # Give A Child (My First Senryu)

Rating: 3.3

Give a child a stick
Watch her create magic, there!
in front of your eyes

© 2009 Sonya Florentino

Alison Cassidy 03 October 2009

Such a perfect subject for this ancient poetic form. And penned with great authority too. (Can't believe this is your first Senryu!) Your poem reminds me of Pooh and his Pooh-sticks. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

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Sandra Fowler 29 September 2009

Pure enchantment. How well you understand the world of a child. Warm wishes, Sandra

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This is simply beautiful. A child can create magic in their imagination. My Mother made my sister a fairy dress and when she got the wand, she said it would not work! My Mother said that it would in her imagination. An excellent first Senryu Sonya.

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Susan Jarvis 27 September 2009

A wonderful first senryu - so few words, so many magical images. S :)

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Rakesh Bedi 25 September 2009

A child with a stick? ? ? Magic is bound to happen, dear.......whether black or white....i dont know.....

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Ben Gieske 06 December 2009

LIke this senryu my surprise that you have written one. I must explore further to see what otheer poetic forms you have used.

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Terri Turrell 20 November 2009

I like the senryu, and you have done it well. The simplicity of the poem and child endears =)

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Sandra Martyres 19 October 2009

A brilliant senryu - the subject is also well chosen...Congratulations 10+++++

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a child is not imprisoned to life...it's creativity and joy is boundless..hard to believe this your first senryu..beautiful

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Meggie Gultiano 04 October 2009

An excellent piece..

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