Black on Black Arts


Whisper - Poem by Black on Black Arts

Waking up back hurting.
Sun in my eyes, mosquito bites on my skin I begin to itch.
Swating away flies I get up from my concrete bed.
Bloodshot eyes see blurry in the light from crying myself
to sleep at night.
I've hit rock bottom but it feels like rock bottom has hit
me as I wander aimlessly for food and shelter.
Just a little taste to curb my growling stomach.
Water ever so important now more than ever as my lips dry
and crack from thirst.What do I do now?
I pray but they go unanswered.
Don't wanna go on living anymore my pain unbearable slowly
losing all sense of reality.
I fall to my knees wanting death a release from the pain
and suffering of a wasted life.
I scream but all that comes out is a whisper
Do you hear it?

Topic(s) of this poem: pain


Comments about Whisper by Black on Black Arts

  • Drtony Brahmin (5/8/2016 12:17:00 AM)

    I fall to my knees wanting death a release from the pain
    and suffering of a wasted life.
    I scream but all that comes out is a whisper
    Do you hear it? pain described with deep emotion.. feeling of pain is filled in your words using different analogies..... thank you dear poet. tony
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  • (2/4/2016 2:33:00 AM)

    Intensely and deeply emotional, gripping my heart and mind with it's silent cry, feeling the pain so completely filling your words and taking me with it into depths of your poem. Rhythm throughout the poem tends to draw out all the pain and emotion from within and placing it crying into the essence of your soul. An excellent and heartfelt poem, totaling encompassing the frustration and heartache of living in poverty. Amazingly poignant! Thank you for sharing it, RoseAnn (Report)Reply

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  • Valerie Hutchinson-morgan (5/13/2015 8:42:00 AM)

    A powerful cry from the depth of the soul. A scream that comes out as a whisper... I can identify.
    Please read my poem Lost http: //members.poemhunter.com/members/club/profile.asp? member=5578899st
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  • Ramesh Rai (5/13/2015 3:40:00 AM)

    iA very beautiful poem with silent cry. Soul always desires for emancipation because life is full of frustration and delusion..Love your emotions. Keep it up. Thanks for sharing.Full marks. (Report)Reply

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  • (10/27/2012 4:41:00 PM)

    A very powerful poem. I especially like the line it feels like rock bottom has hit me and how the question at the end really connects with the reader. (Report)Reply

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  • Ekaterina M. Polischuk (8/28/2012 1:27:00 PM)

    that is not a poem... that is a very painful message for people around you... a silent voice. i agree with Payal Parade, it is very emotional. and as a novelist and a poet i can say, it has a special melody. it is sad but beautiful from the side of your imagination and the way you show it (Report)Reply

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  • (7/31/2012 9:27:00 AM)

    such a painful poem a cry from heart....very well put every word express its own emotion... splendid work
    thank you so much for sharing it with us
    best wishes,
    payal
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  • Meena Mustafa (7/30/2012 12:35:00 PM)

    An emotive poem... full of depth... a wonderful write. (Report)Reply

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  • (7/27/2012 12:47:00 PM)

    sometimes whisper becomes the voice of the spokesperson of oppressed class.Loved this write.thanks for sharing. (Report)Reply

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  • Kasia Fedyk (7/26/2012 12:46:00 PM)

    Very beautiful, filled with deepest emotions and powerful longing for peace within and light through out. I felt every emotion in this poem and became one with it. Beautiful write!
    Kasia
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  • Darkangel Flyfree (7/25/2012 2:14:00 PM)

    This is very deep and powerful, you have touched my heart yet again with your poems! I can so relate to wanting a way out of life, it can hurt so bad, i feel ya. Great poem! ! ! (Report)Reply

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  • Valerie Dohren (7/24/2012 9:47:00 AM)

    Life is rarely wasted, we all have something to give - good one. (Report)Reply

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  • Heather Wilson (7/24/2012 1:50:00 AM)

    So sad within this very clever write, ... talent shines through. (Report)Reply

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  • Kaila George (7/23/2012 5:12:00 PM)

    That is awe inspiring love. It comes across clear but you need to put it in stanza form...breaking it down should be easy enough...but other than that is a great write, not sure how they select your poems could be what they see in how many hits on your actual poem...you can see just how many if you look for one poem and click on stats for that particular poem hope I helped. I think your a brillant poet. (Report)Reply

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  • (7/23/2012 4:06:00 PM)

    true talent and very deep meaning (Report)Reply

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  • (7/23/2012 4:03:00 PM)

    now that's deep love it (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, July 23, 2012

Poem Edited: Sunday, February 14, 2016


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