Wide Open Spaces Poem by Tan Pratonix

Wide Open Spaces

Rating: 4.5


Boyhood memories
Of a school with tree-filled
Wide open spaces
Where we would play ‘Kings and Queens'
With a rubber ball,
Dodging to avoid being hit
And becoming ‘It'.

Playing cricket before classes began,
(And during interval and lunch -
Such was our passion!)
Trying to build up big scores
With a tennis ball,
Which we whacked for sixes and fours -
Sometimes, to one's bad luck,
Getting out for a duck.

Once we played with a cork ball
And a king-size cricket bat,
I got hit on my thumb,
And tears rushed into my eyes.
(Even now, decades later,
I can bend my thumb backward)
Imagine how much that hurt!

Forty years later, I revisited the school.
The trees and open spaces had vanished.
Buildings stood everywhere,
Cramped, suffocating, dark.
The main school building,
(Over one hundred years old)
Choked by these ugly structures,
Seemed to have shrunk.

I went into the principal's office
(A shabby little bunk) ,
The dark bespectacled principal
Seemed a character from Dotheboys Hall.
My joy had faded,
Few words were spoken;
Happy boyhood memories
Are made to be broken.

Tuesday, September 22, 2015
Topic(s) of this poem: games,memories,school
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
(Visit to my old school after 40 years. The wide open spaces where we had played had vanished. Happy memories faded out.)
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Darwin Henry Beuning 29 October 2016

Tan, Nice poem, memories of our yesterdays. What is the name of the school and where is it located? I am surprised that it still exists. My Minnesota school has been torn down and a new one stands in its place. Another 10.

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Geoffrey Fafard 28 October 2016

Hello Tan.Sorrow can be memory's destroyer. Sad but beautifully described.I felt like I was there watching on your re visit.Well penned. cheers Geoffrey

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Amitava Sur 28 September 2015

A remarkable write with a heavy heart find the non existence or a shabby appearence of childhood's fond memories. Very rightly painted that picture here in this poem.

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